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Some people hold the view that young generation is proper for important positions in governments



Helen Neleh 2 / 6  
Aug 24, 2019   #1

The young people and important positions in governments of countries



Some people hold the view that young generation is good for important positions in governments of countries.Others, however, opine that the elderly is better for these jobs. In the following paragraphs, I would like to examine both viewpoints and give my opinion then.

On the one side, people are of the opinion that young leaders are the best choice for some reasons. They are eager to learn new things, so they can follow the social trends and upgrade their job quite well. It enables them to apply the new methods and modern policies which are useful and suitable for their countries. The old ones usually don't have time and passionation to do it. Besides, young people are more open-minded and love taking risky challenges which can help the country get out of its safe zone and develop more quickly. Moreover, young managers are often flexible, fast and they can see many opportunities with their fresh brains, so they are quite suitable for high positions in governments.

In the other hand, with age comes wisdom; the elders have their own strongnesses. They have deep understanding of the government systems and the laws which leads to win-win opportunities when they have to make agreements and trades with other countries. They also own a very wide social network where they can ask for plenty of supports and approvals. With their thick experience, they can learn from old mistakes and avoid some traps or spoils. People, especially ones who are influenced by Asian cultures, prefer working with the old leaders whom they believe that they are more authoriable, reliable and powerful.

Although this is still a controversial topic, I personally consider young leaders can lead the countries well as long as they are good enough. Sometimes, problems can be solved by the talents and sensitivity, not just the experience. We cannot apply the same solution for a kind of problem which happens in different periods of time.

trangxi - / 1  
Aug 28, 2019   #2
I'm not a professional( A student in actual fact) but this is my suggestions. Feel free to take a look at it!

Some people hold the view are of the fervent conviction that (this is a bit more severe but it's a part of my template :) young generation people is good suffieciently competent for important instrumental positions in national governments. ... the elderly is better more qualified for these jobs. In the following paragraphs, ... (Actually you dont need this kind of sentence, since time should be invested in the body paragraphs)

The old ones (Never, ever use ones for people, it's not academic, you should use people here, it's fine to reuse some words) usually don't have ...

In the other hand (Wrong, it must be On the other hand. Also, should it be right, it is still an inconsistent structure, you should use on the other side) with age comes wisdom; ...

... We cannot apply ... periods of time. (Should be a conclusion here, or else it will be kinda a run-on sentence, I recommend begin it with a comma and the word "therefore")
OP Helen Neleh 2 / 6  
Sep 4, 2019   #3
Hi Trangxi
Thanks a lot for all the nice comments and suggestions. I learn a lot from you. Hope you have a nice day :D


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