People's motivation to work in the state-run sector in the country of Bananala during 1995-2010.

Can somebody help me with this, please? I am really in a hurry, thank you!

WORK MOTIVATION

The chart gives information regarding people's motivation to work in the state-run sector in the country of Bananala during 1995-2010.

Overall, the trend was a rise in all driving factors, apart from the insurance-packaged one.

Through the first five years, the number of candidates for job security dived drastically, from over 580 thousand to 380thousand ones. However, after that it made a partial recovery to reach a plateau of 450,000 in 2005. The rate of applicants with the fear of being unemployed started off steadily and increased two-fold afterwards. Since then, it had surpassed the secure job circa 2007 before soaring to 650 thousand. People who wanted to create their own popularities in career rose significantly in the first 5 years, yet increasing more gradually 10 years later to reach the rate of 300 thousand.

In the mid-1990s, the highest number of applicants were recorded in the job security sector probably due to the feeling of safety if they become an official staff rather than the sastisfaction of having higher status. Interestingly, this situation changed remarkably 15 years later as the fright of being unemployment became prominent, leaving the guaranteed job and the desire of higher status to be in the second and third favored respectively. More and more people applied for the public sector to seek for promotion, evidenced by a fivefold increase, as the driving factor was the satisfaction of being recognized. Meanwhile, candidates in the unemployed elsewhere sector rocketed probably owing to the popularity of the unemployment rate with a decrease in the job opportunities.

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Tra, it is extremely difficult to review your paper because you did not properly upload the image. It doesn't want to enlarge so I cannot read the notes on the paper nor clearly see the comparison points for discussion. Please properly upload the image next time. I can tell you this though, your presentation is lengthy but not informative in an excellent manner. If you review the other essays for Task 1 writing at this forum, you will see that you summary overview is severely lacking in information. I do not read about the other required information such as the measurement type, the inclusive years of comparison, a summary of the analysis instructions, and a solid trending statement. By the way, you were given a line graph, not a chart to compare. Familiarize yourself with the different illustrations being used in the task 1 essay to assist you in properly identifying the illustration type in the summary overview.

You also just kept on writing for the sake of increasing your word count. Regardless of whether or not actual information as based on the numerical data from the image was being shared in the third paragraph. Believe me, in the actual test, you will not be able to write 265 words for this task. You need to practice writing 4 paragraphs within the 3-5 sentence format per paragraph. That is the best way to ensure that you will be able to leave editing and revision time for yourself during the actual test. Be sure that all of the required measurements, are represented in the charts are used instead of you offering "estimates" and your own take on the "years indicated" as that changes the analysis from "factual" to "assumed" information.

Also, you are both wrong. The proper sentence structure is "There was an overall rising trend from 1995-2010 based on..." since the graph indicates a continuous growth pattern for a specific period of time. You are describing an action that was continuous in the past. You were required to create a complex sentence presentation for this particular trending statement.