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1. Some people think that it is better to work for different organisations during the career



maichi13 1 / -  
Jun 18, 2021   #1

Some people work for the same organization all their working life



Choosing the correct career path in all one's working life also remains a controversy. While it is believed that working for only an organization is the fundamental choice, some people suppose that doing for varying ones is much better than the former. From my perspective, I would argue that it is better to work for different corporations beyond similar ones.

On the one hand, there is clear evidence for people to support the view that working with the same organization in one's whole working life is justifiable. First and foremost, it is a well-known fact that long-term employees are accustomed to their enterprises for an extended period of time. Accordingly, they will have a profound understanding of how it operates. If staff do their job for a long time, they will become more proficient at work as well as enjoy a wide range of perks such as better promotion and incentives. Secondly, there is no disputing that there would be many chances for employees' recognition and greater job security. Employers, for instance, who always dismiss short-term staff, value royalty and ensure positions of long-term ones.

On the other hand, there are obvious perks that could be witnessed from the fact that proponents of job-hopping can point out some potential merits of individuals' independence and varying skills. To start with, it is commonly believed that job hoppers will become more independent as they also try their hand at different jobs. In other words, they not only collaborate effectively with more colleagues but also adapt to various work environments. This is one of the fundamental foundations to help employees become more flexible and stand by themselves as well. Last but not least, another point that should be taken into consideration is that employees can acquire a variety of skills to become more versatile. Executives, who work in different fields, also have job opportunities with a lucrative income, as a typical example.

In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that working for different organizations is more likely to be successful than working for the same ones.

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Jun 19, 2021   #2
Donot turn the discussion intea controversy. That statement is unnecessary as the writer is altering the original statement presentation. The second sentence lacks subject clarity as the reference to the choices provided was not indicated. The personal opinion provided is not grammatically correct, but manages to get its message across, as is important in that sentence. The addition of a personal reason would have further helped the statement.

The writer provided good justifications for their public opinions. General discussion references kept the - point of view clear to the reader. All that was lacking in the presentation was the expanded personal opinion discussion. A requirement of the prompt that would have ensured the highest possible score for this essay.

While there is a reference to a personal opinion in the concluding paragraph, it really required a stand alone paragraph for score enhancing discussion detail. That is the best presentation format for this type of essay.


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