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Some people think that computers are more of a hindrance than help in today's society



sir99 7 / 8  
Feb 16, 2016   #1
Some people think that computers are more of a hindrance than help in today's society. Others believe that they are such indispensable tools that they would not be able to live or work without them.

Discuss both opinion and give your opinion.


It is widely known that computers can be found everywhere nowadays, and occasionally they are an inevitable realm. While some people regard these technologies tend to be obstacle rather than supportable devices, I would argue that they cannot be separated for our life thank to their huge function.

Following the developing era, computers technology are hardly to be isolated from our daily activities because most of people necessities can be covered by an advanced technology like computers. In supermarkets for example, computer eases tellers in accounting of purchasing or transaction, which result in decreasing number of lines. For this reason, a comfort of shoppers can always be ensured. It is thus an evident proof of why computers is a part of people life.

However, this does not mean that computers cannot be a barrier in the way people ran their life. Firstly, a habit in using computers for writing causes people be lazy in applying handwriting, so without computer people prefer for not writing instead. Furthermore, various tools equipped in computers attracts people in wasting their time. Abundant games and other application installed in computers prompts users to stay home and neglect their main responsibilities for their family and job. Not only this, computers even threat people future in acute dependence, and therefore they are less interaction each other.

To conclude, I do believe that computer's presence in our life has an immense role in spite of any drawbacks. Hence, people have to know how to use it wisely, by means that using computers appropriately is would be a better way has to be thoroughly thought.

AmitJ - / 3  
Feb 17, 2016   #2
Hi Ahmad

It is widely known that computers can be found everywhere nowadays, and occasionally they are an inevitable realm.(can you explain this phrase please and why you have mentioned this? Also make it simple, do not use the words if you are not sure about their usage: here inevitable realm sounds out of place)

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In supermarkets for example, computer eases tellers in accounting of purchasing or transaction, which result in decreasing number of lines(What kind of lines??? Be specific in your words.)

For this reason, a comfort of shoppers can always be ensured. It is thus an evident proof of why computers is a part of people life.

Ok at first I thought you are talking about accounting but then you say shoppers. So its a little bit haphazard when you say supermarkets, accounting and then to shoppers. Be specific and explain it little bit more. I am not able to figure out the main point in this para?? Or make it into two different advantages or try to be consistent and do not mix the words.

However, this does not mean that computers cannot be a barrier in the way people ranrun their life. Firstly, a habit inof using computers for writingtypingcausesmake people be lazy in applying handwritingmanual handwriting , so without computer people prefer for not writing instead????? (In my opinion even typing is a bigger task for lazy people. You can write some other drawbacks instead of writing as it is not sounding like a strong reason for me. You have many other reasons, people feel lazy to work as everything is stored in computer now like phone numbers or records) .

Furthermore, various tools equipped in computers attracts people in wasting their time.
These are not tools rather use the word software or hardware or applications.

Abundant games and other application installed in computers prompts users to stay home and neglect their main responsibilities(responsibilities like?? give examples) for their family and job. Not only this, computers even threat people future in acute dependence, and therefore they are less interaction each other.

What do you mean by this line??? acute dependence? I see that you tried to use many new words but this will make your essay look dull if you are not sure about their usage. So keep it simple which will make your essay look good)

....You have some good points but usage of words in wrong manner has made your essay little bit confused. Hope this helps


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