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Many people think that emigrating from homeland could bring various benefits



alan87ra 1 / -  
Jul 29, 2015   #1
What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live and study abroad?

Nowadays people tend to travel around the world more frequently either for study or settlement. However, there are many benefits and drawbacks for such development.

Many people think that emigrating from homeland could bring various benefits to public and individuals as whole. From Social point of view, living away from native country encourages diversity in the society in the hosted land, because people are exposed to a different cultures and tradition. Also, those who migrate to others countries go into employment, where they boost the economy of the hosted country by paying taxes, as well as boosting they home country's economy by sending money to their families. Furthermore, educational purpose is also one of the main reasons to leave home country. For example, students learn new languages, gain new skills and study at the university that offers more opportunities than own country.

Nevertheless, there are negative aspects of travelling overseas. Language barrier is one common downside that migrants encounter. They struggle to understand the community they had joined. For instance, not be able to socialize with neighbours. Employability difficulties could be resulted as lack of communication and the necessary language skills. Moreover, cultural shock might take a place as a result not to adapt to the new society. In additional, paperwork also could draw attention to inability to fulfil the requirement with immigration office.

To sum up, in the world we live in today's, public movements around the globe become more and more, to live and study in a new country, a range of advantages and disadvantages could be produced due to such movement

justivy03 - / 2265  
Jul 29, 2015   #2
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- ...various benefits to the public and individuals as whole.
- From Social the social point of view, living away from ones native country encourages diversity in
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- ..those who migrate to others countries go intofor employment,
- where they boost the economy of the hosted country by paying taxes,
- ...that offers more opportunities than their own country.
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Aside from the fact that you forgot your linking verbs and verb form, you also have a few misspelled words, this remarks are quiet major and you have to be very careful.
veaenia 3 / 5  
Aug 3, 2015   #3
Hello, Alan!
I want to give some suggestion about your essay

Nowadays people tend to travel around the world more frequently either for study or settlement. However, there are many benefits and drawbacks for such development.

Your introduction is good. however, it isn't brief enough to emphasize your thought. Here is my example for this introduction;
Study and working in different countries are growing trend in current society. As such, most people argue that this is beneficial, since going overseas can widen the diversity of the visited area, develop the financial for both countries, and broaden people's knowledge. However, It is believed that moving abroad brings several drawbacks for the newcomers because they will experience language and cultural barriers. Therefore, I would suggest that going abroad is the best idea to obtain an excellent education and career.

To sum up, in the world we live in today's, public movements around the globe become more and more, to live and study in a new country, a range of advantages and disadvantages could be produced due to such movement

Also your conclusion has to restate your previous opinions and a recommendation. Let me give a try;
To conclude, this is apparent that an ideal future can be achieved by immigrating to other countries. While these immigrants diverse the country, since they give new colors to the culture, this helps the native and dwelled countries to improve the economic stability. Likewise, people can acquire an immense knowledge because they are exposed to the whole new customs and characters. Where possible, the advantages of immigration can be seized by the school and work seekers.

Hope this can help, thank you! - Vania Herlambang


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