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Some people think that it is good to keep pets at home


Makrine 1 / 1  
Jun 12, 2015   #1
Some people think that it is good to keep pets at home. But there is no doubt in my mind that keeping pets at home is not a good idea. Firstly, pets need a big space to play. Secondly, it is too expensive to keep them.

Pets are very active creatures. They always need enough space to play and run. Any house is too small for animals, as they are very energetic. When pet does not have space it becomes inactive and it is possible to have disease.

Animals need caring. All the things what is necessary and important for them is not cheap. Therefore keeping pets is expensive.
The obvious conclusion to be drawn is that pets are very active and they need a big space to live well.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Jun 12, 2015   #2
- FirstlyFirst , pets need a big space to play.

- SecondlySecond , it is too expensive to keep them.

Makrine, as you can see above, there's very few and minor corrections that I made, simply because your essay is written well.
However, your essay is quiet short, I suggest adding a few more paragraphs to it and elaborate your points further.

I, myself is an advocate of animal welfare. I always strive to promote and educate people about taking good care of animals.
Animals in general are very delicate, sensitive and they are our help in times when we cannot trust the people around us anymore.
Taking care of animals is indeed very tricky, not only because they require undivided attention and a little bit of expenditure, also because they need constant training and we need to nurture there capabilities of helping people and even further, save lives.

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You can add a few points from the one I've written. I hope it helps.

Keep writing

Cheers!!!
OP Makrine 1 / 1  
Jun 12, 2015   #3
Thank you for correction. I am 14 years old and I am very keen on animals, especially dogs :)
aseprudi 20 / 29 16  
Jun 13, 2015   #4
Hallo Makrine, I would render you some suggestion :

Some people think that it is good to keep pets at home. But there is no doubt in my mind that keeping pets at home is not a good idea. Firstly, pets need a big space to play. Secondly, it is too expensive to keep them.

Inhabitants convince is renders beneficial effect in order to maintain pets in private home. However, I am of notion nurturing creatures in the place at which we grow up create dire consequence. For this reason, pets require large adequate space. Subsequently, it costs people an arm and a leg for maintaining them healthy.

Thank you.


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