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IELTS;Some people think parents should read or tell stories


septem1821 3 / 24 7  
Sep 2, 2013   #1
Q: Some people think parents should read or tell stories to children, while others think parents need not do that, as children can read books, watch TV or movies by themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The attitude of children towards society is majorly based on the knowledge acquired from books or through electronic media such as TV and movies. Some believe that parents have the responsibility of reading stories for their children while others oppose it with that children have the capability in reading or understanding things on media, so parents have any role in such matters. Here are some of the pros and cons to these beliefs.

Parents are considered as the first teachers to their kids and they can easily influence and shape children's thought process due to their intimate bonding with them . Importantly, they can convey the right information from the vast knowledge of books and media in a precise way. In addition, parents can get a chance to broaden their children's views by discussing various elements while telling stories. Furthermore, they can teach about communication skills such as usage of vocabulary, reading methods and even listening abilities. On the contrary, children may develop dependent attitude if parents help in such activities and they will acquire parents' attitude and behavior because of not getting an opportunity to think in a different direction.

Children will accomplish their unique individuality by making their self decisions and judgements if they are allowed to read and watch on their own. Moreover, it will help them to improve their concentration and dedication which in turn bring major changes in their academic progress. In addition, the creativity and imaginations will be moulded according to the their own experiences and perceptions. On the other hand, they will develop their own opinions without knowing about the positive and negative elements which will impact their personality development.

To summarize, I can say that both approaches have their own advantages and disadvantages but parents have the major impact on the development of positive attitude in children as they guide them in each element. However, parents should act in such a way that the learning abilities and independent characters of children should not be compromised.

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gmad06 20 / 151 55  
Sep 2, 2013   #2
Nice one! A good example of an equally balanced response, which is very difficult to do by the way.
I would suggest to try getting out of your comfort zone by using more complex vocabulary.
Is this for IELTS? Were you able to do this in the alloted time of 40 minutes?
OP septem1821 3 / 24 7  
Sep 2, 2013   #3
hi
Thanks for the immediate reply. yes, iam preparing for the ielts and i will try to implement complex vocabulary.. I have some doubts. It would be great if you clarify them.

1) I am having confusion in using articles, could you give a brief idea about it, particularly in the usage of 'the'.

2) which is right? childrens' or children's

3) when should we use comma.
a) it is famous across the world, especially among young. Should i use comma before especially?
b) It is crucial for them, importantly, for children. should i use two comma here?
c) it has many features, namely, video, photos and recording. should i use two commas here?

4)a)if they ask for do you agree or disagree in ielts exam, do we need to write the cons of that subject or so do we need to focus only on pros?

6)which is correct? lifestyle or life-style. can we use pleural form for lifestlye?

Thanks in advance.
please help me.
gmad06 20 / 151 55  
Sep 2, 2013   #4
1) I am having confusion in using articles, could you give a brief idea about it, particularly in the usage of 'the'

"the" is used to address a particular noun, like when I say "Let's go to the park", I am referring to a specific park. When I say

"Let's go to a park", I am not specifying a particular park, any park will do.

2) which is right? childrens' or children's

'children' is the plural for 'child' so only the word children's exist

3) when should we use comma.
a) it is famous across the world, especially among young. Should i use comma before especially?
b) It is crucial for them, importantly, for children. should i use two comma here?
c) it has many features, namely, video, photos and recording. should i use two commas here?

usage of comma really depends on the writer, think of it this way: 'comma' is a small stop while 'period' is a full stop for your reader

so it is upon the writer's discretion on how he wants the reader to read his essay
naturally you would want to put commas on most cohesive words and items you enumerate

4)a)if they ask for do you agree or disagree in ielts exam, do we need to write the cons of that subject or so do we need to focus only on pros?

in my opinion and experience, if I strongly agree on one side, then I won't talk about the opposing side
if I partly agree and disagree on the theory, then I should write about both sides

6)which is correct? lifestyle or life-style. can we use pleural form for lifestlye?

try to stick with lifestyle and its plural lifestyles

hope this helps...
OP septem1821 3 / 24 7  
Sep 3, 2013   #5
thank you so much. you are very helpful.
OP septem1821 3 / 24 7  
Sep 3, 2013   #6
Q: In order to learn a language well, we should also learn about the country as well as the cultures and lifestyles of the people who speak this language. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Language plays an important role as it is the only way of communicating channel among people. There is a belief that people have to learn about the nation's values and the characteristics of native speakers when learning a foreign language. I completely agree with them and here are some of the supporting views.

The rich history has been transferring from generations to generations in the form of books and it is being preserved by people in the form of their traditional script. So, the past events and the values of a nation are being exemplified through its language. Indians do not work on 2nd of October during every year in order to show the respect towards Their Father of Nation, Mahatma Gandhi Ji. If learners make fun of that day without knowing its significance, it may lead into patriotic feeling between nations. Likewise, there are many religious festivals in India which should be experienced by foreigners before learning the local languages because it will eliminate the chances of misinterpretation and misunderstandings between them and locals.

Furthermore, learners can get a chance to use language accurately and appropriately if they know the lifestyles of locals. Tourists cannot wish Indian ladies by shaking hands because it is not accepted in their customs.Likewise, foreigners' major foods contain pork and beef but these animals have religious values in Indian custom. Moreover, native speakers' accent varies because of having different dialects and nuances for them which will be understand be having a deep insight into their way of lifestyles. Lastly, non-native speakers language skills also depends on the climatic conditions of the local area because it has some effect on tongue twist.

To summarize, I can say that country history and the lifestyles are crucial factors in learning a language because they direct the learner in a precise way so that they can learn it in an organised way.

please correct it.
Thanks.
gmad06 20 / 151 55  
Sep 3, 2013   #7
it is not a good idea to post your new essay here, you should start another thread
it may be against the forum rules...just a reminder..
OP septem1821 3 / 24 7  
Sep 3, 2013   #8
sorry. I am new to this forum.I will definitely follow the rules.

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