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Some people think that secondary school students should study international news



thuyloan 1 / -  
Nov 5, 2025   #1
It is assumed that international news should be studied as a subject in formal academics while others argue that this is a waste of quality time at school. While both points of view are justifiable to a certain degree, I gravitate towards the former standpoint, for the reasons given below.

Admittedly, it is understandable why some believe that secondary students should concentrate on other important disciplines instead of using their valuable time learning global information. One justification for their argument is that the education of universal news at school is redundant while the wide spread of this information enables students to multidimensional approach. Via technological devices and social media platforms, the young can easily access new knowledge worldwide rather than in the past when such information was solely gained through physical methods. In addition, the wide range of general information can lead to the lack of personalization among students. This is because secondary students are encouraged to pursue main subjects such as maths and literature, which cater for higher education and future personal growth. As a result, learning about a huge range of knowledge around the world can disrupt them to specialize in a certain discipline.

Despite above-mentioned arguments, I strongly believe that this addition can feasibly foster students' holistic developments and greater awareness regarding globalization. One reason for this belief is that despite the significant accessibility of international new sources, students may neglect such information due to the lack of guidance. To clarify, the young often use mass media for entertainment, limiting their approach to international knowledge. Therefore, the addition of subjects focusing on global knowledge can help to improve the wisdom of secondary students and ensure the update regarding important knowledge. For instance, the neglectation of new information and global changes such as climate change can cause alarming phenomena to both future generations and society.

In conclusion, for the reasons listed , I strongly believe that the addition of international knowledge learning can obviously contribute to an overall development among young generations though it seems evident that both views have their own unique advantages.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15921  
Nov 6, 2025   #2
for the reasons given below.

Your thesis statement based upon the writer's opinion is incomplete. you will receive reduced points for presenting a point of view without a summary of your 2 reasoning topics. Points are not provided when the writer does not complete the summary of his discussion. The TA score will be reduced as the writer's opinion does not follow the required information format.

The discussion format used is also incorrect. The essay is over written in terms of word count and does not properly provide a clear opinion discussion for each public opinion. You cannot provide a public opinion discussion then suddenly shift to a personal opinion in the next paragraph. The correct format is:

1. Public opinion statement
2. Reason
3. Your point of view regarding this opinion
4. Your reason for supporting or not supporting it.

This is actually a compare and contrast essay so discussing each public opinion based on your personal opinion is a requirement for task accuracy.

Kindly avoid writing in run on sentences. This is the main reason why you ended up with an over written essay. You run the risk of not completing this discussion during the actual test because you focused on essay length rather than response quality. You will not gain extra points for writing a long essay. Instead, you could increase your chances of score deductions due to the possibility of more writing rules violations and grammar errors.


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