Task 1: The percentage of seven leisure activities; needlework not as popular as watching TV/DVDs

The percentage of seven leisure activities which have been asked to three categories of age group is depicted in the table. Overall, it can be seen that watching TV/DVDs, social gathering and listening to music showed the highest leisure activities among all of the age group except 60-69 generation in listening to music. Other activities placed moderate position in all of the age categories, while gardening and dressmaking were less popular in 16-19 generation.

Firstly, the same percentage of watching TV/DVDs displayed roughly a hundred percent among 16-19, 25-29 and 60-69 age groups. Similar pattern to watching, social gathering (visiting, entertaining friends and relations) experienced the second popular activity with 98 per cent for both 16-19 and 25-29 and 95 per cent for 60-69 peer group. Young generation showed listening to music (above nine in ten) as the dominant activity as well, while the old age only presented nearly two-third.

Subsequently, reading books presented a equal percentage among all of the age group with virtually two-third. However, few activities displayed quite differences such DIY activity that was popular (50%) in 25-29 age group, while 16-19 and 60-69 age group only 25% and 38%. Gardening illustrated a dominant activity for only 60-69 peer group with just over six in ten, whereas 16-19 and 25-29 were only a quarter and above a half of the percentage of 60-69 peer group, respectively. Needlework showed less popular activity with 9, 14 and 27 per cent for 16-19, 25-29 and 60-69 generations, respectively.

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