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IELTS 1: The percentage of teachers recruitment by year of graduation in Ontario



aflah15 32 / 18  
Jan 20, 2016   #1
The line graph provides information about selection of English and French teachers in Ontario according to the graduation year from 2001 to 2007, a six-year period and measured in percentage. Overall, it can be seen that a gap between two different teacher's groups had narrowed down in 2001, whereas it showed the large difference in the end of period.

Students who graduated in 2001 and taught English had the similar number with France teachers, at about 70%. Over the next three years, there was a significant drop in the total of English teachers, at approximately a half of the previous proportion. On the other hand,, the first-year French teachers witnessed a fluctuation, at over 50% and below 70% respectively. 2003 to 2005 saw a slight increase, by 3% for both French and English teachers.

In 2007, students who became French teachers reached a peak at 75%, even though the number decreased considerably at over two-thirds in 2006. On the other hand, just a few of the students who were chosen as English teachers in the end of time frame since there was a sharp fall over two years, at 28%.


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swara86 2 / 10  
Jan 20, 2016   #2
In 2007, students who became French teachers reached ...
2006 witnessed a steady decrease, then peaked a high of approximately 75% for the last year
vangiespen - / 4077  
Jan 24, 2016   #3
you have a very good grasp of the chart information. You were able to properly depict the information in the essay report. Your sentence structure is not too complicated, but not too simple either. let's say that you have a moderately advanced use of the English language. This is what led to your stronger essay report. The confidence in your writing is evident.

... about THE selection of English and French teachers ... the THEIR graduation year from 2001 to 2007, COVERING a six-year period ... groups had narrowed down in 2001, whereas it showed the A large difference in AT the end of THE period.

... English had the A similar number with THE France... at approximately a half of the previous proportion.... French teachers witnessed SHOWED a fluctuation, at over 50% and BUT below 70% ...

... reached a peak at OF 75%, ... chosen as English teachers in AT the end of THE time frame since...


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