the proportion of energy production in France
The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.
The pie charts compare the proportion of energy production in France in the years 1995 and 2005.
Overall, at the beginning of the period, coal made the highest contribution to the energy production in France, while other sectors made up the smallest part of the chart and 2005 experienced the same trend with coal and other sectors.
Other sector accounted for 4,9% of France's energy production in 1995 and experienced a half increase to 9,10% in 2005. Energy production from nuclear was 6.4% in 1995 and had a slight growth of 3.7% in 2005. At the beginning of the period, gas and coal made up 29,65% and 29,80% of France's energy production respectively, and these figures rose to 30,31% and 30,93% in 2005.
Petro, which comprised almost the highest rate in energy production in France in 1995, suddenly fell to 19,55% in 2005 and came in second in the pie chart of 2005.
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