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TOEFL/Disagree Playing Computer Games wastes time and students should not be allowed!



cshcara 2 / 4  
Jan 22, 2014   #1
Playing Computer Games wastes time and students should not be allowed to play it.

It is a debatable subject that children should not be allowed to play computer games since playing computer games is a a waste of time. I hold a positive view against this opinion.

First and foremost, a large number of students are obsessed in on-line computer games and as a result their performance in school are declined. An investigation done by Beijing University shows that 80% of the students who failed in the final exam paid 2 hours or more on-online games every week, while 90% excellent students expressed that they did not touch computer games during the most of the days. Recent research by Scientist also reveals that the youngs are more likely to be attacted by and lose themselves in these computer games, because of their low control ability.

Second, children could learn nothing from these computer games, therefore time on this activity is really time wasting. Since all these games are developed for commercial purpose and in order to catch the eyes of the children, majority of the games use war, violence, bloody, or sexual subjects to lure the students. However, those subjects are not suitable for the students and will bring bad effects to the youths.

Admittedly, there are a few students paying considerable time on the computer games playing finally choose computer games related jobs as their career. But we have to realize the fact: majority of the students failed in front of the computer games playing and they use their time for studying, sleeping and physical exerice to play these computer games. It is not uncommon that the teenages are found sleepless for several days playing on-line games at public internet bar, and there are also some media reports regarding the sudden death case of the teenages in the internet bar.

In conclusion, I believe it is better that children are not be allowed to play the computer games. The computer games are like cigerate to adults and we need to set up rules to regulate this area.

cheetha 1 / 2  
Jan 23, 2014   #2
hi,
the topic is quite interesting and i have some suggestions ..

its helpful to use references when stating the facts...
and
children could learn nothing from these computer games
well some may say computer games may be helpful in increasing mind sharpness, response time etc. openly state and demerit such facts...

Regards
sntinn 8 / 27  
Jan 23, 2014   #3
therefore time on this activity is really time wasting

in order to catch the eyes of the children,majority of the games use war, violence, bloody, or sexual subjects to lure the students.

You should separate this sentence into two sentences, and in fact, these sentences should be put in different paragraphs. Because in the 2nd paragraph, you are talking about how computer game steals time from children. Thus, in the next paragraph, you may introduce the violence conveyed to children by computer game. I believe that there are many examples of children or teenages that applied the violence from computer games to their real life such as gun shooting, raping, etc.

Admittedly, there are a few students paying considerable time on the computer games playing finally choose computer games related jobs as their career.

Admittedly, ...is used at the beginning of the sentence to introduce a concession or recognition that something is true or is the case.
For example, "admittedly, the salary was not wonderful, but the duties were light."
So, you may say that

Admittedly, there were students who eventually became game designers, but despite the time that they lost, only a few of them went for this job.


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