Unanswered [1]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width   Posts: 2


Is it not possible nor useful to provide tertiary education for the majority of young people



Pham Thu Thuy 1 / -  
Aug 12, 2021   #1

It is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of young people



Some people might argue that providing tertiary education for the majority of young people is not possible and useful. Personally, I disagree with these ideas and will outline my reasons in the essay below.

Nowadays, obtaining a university degree no longer has a vital role to get a good job in the future of young people even in this knowledge-based society. Firstly, in recent years, the demand for labor who gain specific skills or practical skills is increasing rapidly, which opens the door to better career prospects as well as job security for graduates of vocational school. These make vocational education more popular among young people, become a substitute for academic courses. Secondly, if the government intervenes deeply in the structure of the labor market, that would cause imbalances in the workforce because it could not only lead to an abundance of university graduates who are less likely to choose blue-collar jobs such as machine operators or technicians but also cause the shortage of skilled workers.

On the other hand, I think that it is impossible to support a large number of young people to be admitted to college. On top of that, paying for all exorbitant education costs will put a financial burden on the national budget. The government is likely to face a high risk of a budget deficit. Viet Nam, in fact, is a developing country with limited resources the government needs to allocate its national budget properly for other key areas which also promote sustainable development, such as the economy and healthcare. Additionally, the limitation of the human resources and material facilities, which has not kept pace with the soaring number of students on campus, leads to the degradation of tertiary education.

I conclusion, I strongly oppose the idea of dispensing university education to a high proportion of young people owing to the arguments presented above

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15467  
Aug 13, 2021   #2
The writer offers a basic disagreement rather than the required emotional extent response As asked by the discussion prompt. The writer must provide a degree of support to help convince the reader of his conviction in his point of meer. The response format is incomplete and also, could be considered incorrect by some examiners. The scores are affected when expected response formats are not used by the writer when creating the thesis sentence. Always provide proper response to avoid partial or non - application of section scores.

The response paragraphs are comparative where single opinion presentations are needed. The whole point is to convince the reader that the disagreement is the correct opinion. However, using a comparison that gives support to both ideas destroys the previously stated opinion. Where there was once a clear opinion, only a questionable opinion is seen by the lader. This will cause the essay to not fulfill opinion clarity requirements and instead be scored based on a confusing and stressful presentation..


Home / Writing Feedback / Is it not possible nor useful to provide tertiary education for the majority of young people
ⓘ Need Writing or Editing Help?
Fill out one of these forms for professional help:

Best Writing Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳