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TOEFL:At present we rely on oil for most our energy needs!



greentea93 7 / 26  
Jan 23, 2010   #1
At present we rely on oil for most our energy needs. However,oil is a fossil fuel and causes air pollution,and it will eventually run out. Nuclear energy is the only practical and clean source of energy for the world. In what extent do you agree or disagree?

Oil is a fossil fuel,which is one of the major sources of energy we are
using. Although oil is cheap and easy to use, using it can cause air
pollution and it sooner or later will be exhausted. The question is that is
there a practical,powerful and clean source of energy for the world?
Nuclear energy would be the best answer to this. There is however a
debate on using nuclear energy. In my point of view, it can't be denied
that nuclear energy has some benefits but it seems leave more negative
effects than positive ones.
First of all, nuclear energy is cleaner than oil.coal.gas,etc because it
produces no smoke,emmision, which we may inhale when we use fossil
fuels. Smoke from oil,coal,gas can lead to air pollution and some diseases
such as lung cancer,bronchitist,ashmas,etc. That's why it is obviously
healthier to use nuclear energy. Adding to this, nuclear energy is
surprisingly efficient.For example, a nuclear power factory can provide
energy to the Earth using within 2 years.
Besides some advantages above, nuclear nergy has numerous
disadvantages. Firstly,using nuclear energy is very very dangerous
because reactors produce nuclear waste products emitting
dangerous radiation,,which is extremely harmful for the body and can
cause death. In case there's a mistake made by human or technology, it
can lead to unexpected horrible accidents, which may distroy the whole
country using it or more than that. For instance,in 1957,nuclear wastes
buried at a dump site in Russia's Ural Mountains, near Moscow,
mysteriously exploded and caused the death of dozens of people.
Secondly, nuclear energy encourage nuclear weapon race,which
may threat to the peace since its devastation is unexpected large,
destroying not only contries taking part in war but other countries as well.
In addititon, nuclear energy is so expensive that not every country can use
it. It costs a lot of money and requires modern technology. Lastly, there's
lots of other source of energy can replace nuclear energy such as wind
energy,solar energy, water energy,etc which are avalable,environmental
friendly and more importanly they are unlimited.
To sum up, despite advantages from nuclear energy, using it is still too
dangerous. We should limit to use it or if we use it,we have to be very
careful. There's lots of other sources of energy which are clean
powerful too we can use instead of nuclear energy.

Please give feedbacks to my essay.Thank you so much.

happyhourman - / 10  
Jan 24, 2010   #2
So back to your prompt-do you agree or disagree? You did not really answer the question-you seem to be in the middle. So, if you do agree, expand the benefits of nuclear energy. You need to show why it is very useful and how the pros outweighs the cons. If possible, don't list any negative aspects towards using nuclear energy. If you are against it, same thing, just don't mention any benefits of nuclear energy.

Pros: Very efficient, no air pollution, shows signs of a very powerful country etc.
Cons: promotes competition, very dangerous, hazardous, no immediate negative signs but will eventually take its toll, etc.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jan 25, 2010   #3
The issue at hand is the question of how to provide a pr actical, powerful and clean source of energy for the world?
Nuclear energy would be the best answer to this. There is however a
debate on using nuclear energy.

In my point of view, it can't be denied
that nuclear energy has some benefits but it seems leave more negative
effects than positive ones. --------- this is a decent thesis statement. It is not fascinating, but it is clear and "argumentative." it is arguable, in the sense that some can disagree with you, and that makes it a good essay.

That last paragraph should be longer. It should explain your reasoning. You can reflect on our options and assert that, for as long as safer options are feasible, it is better to choose them.

:-)
OP greentea93 7 / 26  
Jan 28, 2010   #4
Many thanks you guys for your helpful feedbacks.
Have a nice day.^^


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