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IELTS Task 1: The price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne


nhidinh1231 1 / -  
Nov 25, 2021   #1

price of flight tickets in Australia



The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.

The given chart highlight the data of in round tickets for flights back and forth between Melbourne and Sydney in Australia over a couple of week in 2013.

Generally, what stands out from the graph is that ticket prices fluctuated between days of the week, which were noticeably high on Monday and the weekend, being significantly lower in the middle days of the week.

Regarding the figure of the airline ticket price in week 1, of which the Sydney-to-Melbourne ticket on Monday rocket the pinnacle of 80$, while in the weekday, the cost leveled down to be approximately 30$ and 40$ and then being dramatically raised in the weekday. In contrast, the round-trip ticket on Friday, surpassed Monday's to become the most costly ticket in week 2, recorded the highest figure of roughly 80$was on Friday, the Monday's one was ranked to be the second.

In terms of the ticket price in the flight trip in week 2, they showed the similarity when the weekend days tickets price seem to be higher more than those on the other days, of which, the Sydney-to-Melbourne ticket on Friday was higher than the flight-back ticket about 15$. While the middle days' price did not show any clear price difference, which constantly accounted for the lowest cost, Monday's day flight fare in Melbourne-to-Sydney flight showed a $20 decrease in the price of Monday tickets



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Nov 26, 2021   #2
Two things are missing from your summary overview. The first is the number of charts. The second, is the type of charts. You also do not identify that the infomation presented is for both ways, using the same start and end points in reverse formation for each image. Identifying the image by destination would have helped with that clarification. You are also using a singular reference platform for what should be plural indicators since there are 2 images presented. Be consistent. These must be discussed in plural form due to the non-singular number of images.

Monday's

You do not need an apostrophe here because you are not indicating a possession of an item. The apostrophe version is used only when indicating ownership.

In terms of the ticket price in the flight trip in week 2,

This is confusing. You are not grouping the discussions properly. You should be compelting each comaprison discussion for the charts in single paragraphs. One paragraph for week 1 and 2, based on destination each. I find the information presentation confusing to follow and difficult to connect with either of the given images.


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