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Essay on Prince Edward Island, Colonel Gray Highschool and reasons why you want to enter this school



kittenmeo24 1 / -  
Dec 14, 2021   #1

my struggle with formal vocabulary and transmission



Title: Write an essay about Prince Edward Island, Colonel Gray Highschool and reasons why you want to enter this school (1000 words)
·PRINCE EDWARD ISLAND:
Prince Edward Island of Canada really had me at hello after I first saw it through a short video on Youtube. It is spectacular in many ways and I genuinely consider it to be one of the most peaceful paradises in world.

Prince Edward Island is an island located in the Gulf of St. Lawrence, which is the smallest province by area and population in Canada. Prince Edward Island is the only province island and is connected to the mainland by North America's longest sea-crossing bridge, the Federation Bridge. Despite its humble area, the island is a perfect combination of beaches, sand dunes, red rocks with a huge variety of bays and harbours. Prince Edward Island has mild maritime climate, which is significantly influenced by the ocean surrounding, especially in winter, the weather is relatively chilled to the bone.

Prince Edward Island mainland is predominantly covered with grasswards and fileds, along with many colorful houses and cottages dotted across the face of the island, which make it definitely resemble to a masterpiece of a wonderful rural area. From the coast of the island, we can enjoy the whole stunning seaview and even hear the harmony of birds chirping and surf during the entire day. Moreover, Prince Edward Island is a paradise of quintessential maritime homes, where you can literally get a strong sense of oceanic atmosphere and smell the salty flavour lingered over the air.

The traditional culture of the island is a profound standout, particularly arts and music. Prince Edward Island is famous for Confederation center of the Arts, a gorgeous artistic hub playing host to annual Charlottetown festival, where you can take in a diverse array of the world-class music theatre productions. In terms of sport, hockey, golf, basketball, horse racing, etc. are popular in Prince Edward Island, especially in the summer, water sports are the most preffered.

The magnificent image of Prince Edward Island has been sticking in my mind since the first sight. I would love to have an opportunity to experience a new lifestyle and engage in such incredible cultures in this romantic island.

·COLONEL GRAY HIGH SCHOOL
Colonel Gray High School is a public high school in Charlottetown, Prince Edward Island, which plays an administrative part in the Public Schools Branch. Genuinely, I am energetically impressed by its mascot Colonel and official colours: Burgundy and Grey, which make them the idiosyncratic characteristics of the high school

In 1966, Colonel Gray High School was established, named after Colonel John Hamilton Gray, former Premier of Prince Edward Island for the 2-year period started from 1863 and chairman of the Confederation conference of 1864. In 2009, Colonel Gray High School became an International Baccalaureate World School offering the International Baccalaureate Diploma Programme to students for a certain number of subjects, such as: Biology Higher Level, Visual Arts Standard, Math Standard Level, History Higher Level, etc.

Generally, campus of Colonel Gray High School is sizeble, which is partially covered with verdurous grasswards and trees like a colossal maze. The school consists of approximately over one hundred classrooms, icluding laboratories for practical experiments: a chemistry laboratory, a biology laboratory, an automotive shop, four computer laboratories, etc., most of which are equipped with Smart Boards. Other spaces such as Cafeteria, Student Council office for Student Event planning, a gymnasium with a fitness centre, Specialist instruction space and Library are also built into the school's infrastructure system.

It is impossible not to mention sports in Colonel Gray High School. Sport teams offered for girls and boys at Colonel Gray comprise of basketball, rugby, soccer, golf, badminton, etc. Sport tournaments is one of the most worth waiting events of the year, including: The Wall of Fame Cup, a men's and women's volleyball and soccer tournament hosted in October; The Colonel Gray Classic, a women's basketball tournament and The Gray Cup, a men's basketball tournament that hosted in early December by Colonel Gray High School.

Extracurricular activities such as clubs and organizations are the last grace notes to wrap up this Colonel Gray sheet music. There is a large number of activities involving in diverse fields, for instance: Student Council, Dance Committee, Yearbook Committee, Gray Entertainment Television, Confederation Center Homework Club, etc., which you can feesibly go in for the one you are interested in.

·REASONS WHY I WOULD LOVE TO STUDY AT COLONEL GRAY HIGH SCHOOL
In spite of the remoteness between my country, Vietnam and Canada, I have always craved to gain admission to Colonel Gray High School for reasons that are not difficult to comprehend.

First of all, friendly and healthy environment of the school definitely attracts me. Not only is Colonel Gray High School prominent in its high-quality curriculum but also a great quantity of trees and patches of grassward covered the face of the school yard, which make a massive contribution to numerous campaigns aimed at protecting environment for a clean green unniversal atmosphere and lifestyles.

Secondly, as I mentioned, Colonel Gray High School is home to several extracurricular activities, such as outdoor pursuits, clubs and organisations. Genuinely, I am an outgoing person, thus, open-air activities are absolutely my cup of tea. I hopefully wish that I could have an opportunity to participate in a few of them so as to develop myself in such collective and team-building activities and make new acquantances as well.

Last but not least, Colonel Gray High School is located in Prince Edward Island, Canada, which is the country I have been dreaming of for years. I desire to explore more intersting things in this North American country, such as: its cultural diversity, lifestyle of indigenous people, various kind of speacialities, etc. Furthermore, career prospect in Canada is one of my most crucial targets in the future, therefore, I would love to experience the corporate culture here and get to know more about this Maple Leaves country.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15379  
Dec 14, 2021   #2
While the prompt seems to indicate that you should use an outline format to respond to the questions, the reality is that the reviewers will be looking for your ability to write an engaging and imaginative essay in paragraph format. That way you can take the reviewers along with you on your journey of discovery and how these indicators led to your decision to attend Colonel Grey High School.

Remember, your outline titles count as part of the word allowance. Do not waste that count. Outlining your response is totally unnecessary since your essay is pretty solid at this point. You just need to connect the paragraphs better to allow for a more integrated response. Revise the essay to blend the outlined responses instead.

Truth be told, the first half of this presentation sounds like it was taken directly from travel websites and researched information. There is no personal connection between the places and your decision to attend the high school. Work on creating the personal connection in the blended response. Focus less on the image and more on the way that you believe you will benefit from exposure to these places in terms of your physical, mental, academic, and social development as a high school student.


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