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Universities should accept equal numbers male and female students in every subject. To what exent do ou agree or dsagree?
The problem of gender equality in the university admissions has recently raised the public's awareness. The discussion of whether the colleges should reserve the same addmission quotas for male and female is a very controversy one. Personally, I prefer that the school should accept the students based on their academic performance rather than their genders. There are countless reasons why I hold this opinion, and I would explore a few of the most important ones here.
To begin with, the main reason that can be seen by everyone that the two genders have their own strengths in different fields. Just as the sayings goes: "Every man has his hobby-horse.", people are tended to take subjects according to their own strong points, which are always restricted to their genders. It can be given a concrete example. Physics-majored-students in the world over are dominated by males. This is because majority of boys are good at mathematics. Therefore, it would be wise for universities to sort out applicants by their performance in particular subjects rather to keep the same number of students in gender.
Another factor we may consider is that degrees cannot be offered equally when the genders are not in 1 to 1 ratio. Whether having a baby boy or baby girl is random and cannot be controlled. Take the phenomenon in China last year for an example, it is an obvious case. Number of male students graduated from secondary school is 1.38 times of the female ones. If the universities were forced to keep a balanced gender ratio among the freshman, admission competition among male students would be raised due to the collapsed percentage of degree offered for boys. This is to say that gender inequality would still present.
Admittedly, keeping the balance over gender in subjects has its own merits. It is true that chances of addmission for both male and female could be conserved. Nevertheless, the academic performance would be greatly diverged if the degrees are reserved for the weaker students. Difference in students' learning pace would lower the quality of teaching. After carefully weighing in the mind, I can hardly consent to this proposal because it is so inconseivable and impractical.
On the whole, for the reasons presented above, it is sagacious to against the statement that the universities should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject.
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Universities should accept equal numbers male and female students in every subject. To what exent do ou agree or dsagree?
The problem of gender equality in the university admissions has recently raised the public's awareness. The discussion of whether the colleges should reserve the same addmission quotas for male and female is a very controversy one. Personally, I prefer that the school should accept the students based on their academic performance rather than their genders. There are countless reasons why I hold this opinion, and I would explore a few of the most important ones here.
To begin with, the main reason that can be seen by everyone that the two genders have their own strengths in different fields. Just as the sayings goes: "Every man has his hobby-horse.", people are tended to take subjects according to their own strong points, which are always restricted to their genders. It can be given a concrete example. Physics-majored-students in the world over are dominated by males. This is because majority of boys are good at mathematics. Therefore, it would be wise for universities to sort out applicants by their performance in particular subjects rather to keep the same number of students in gender.
Another factor we may consider is that degrees cannot be offered equally when the genders are not in 1 to 1 ratio. Whether having a baby boy or baby girl is random and cannot be controlled. Take the phenomenon in China last year for an example, it is an obvious case. Number of male students graduated from secondary school is 1.38 times of the female ones. If the universities were forced to keep a balanced gender ratio among the freshman, admission competition among male students would be raised due to the collapsed percentage of degree offered for boys. This is to say that gender inequality would still present.
Admittedly, keeping the balance over gender in subjects has its own merits. It is true that chances of addmission for both male and female could be conserved. Nevertheless, the academic performance would be greatly diverged if the degrees are reserved for the weaker students. Difference in students' learning pace would lower the quality of teaching. After carefully weighing in the mind, I can hardly consent to this proposal because it is so inconseivable and impractical.
On the whole, for the reasons presented above, it is sagacious to against the statement that the universities should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject.
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