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The process of the greenhouse effect in the earth' surface - too much gases accumulated


shintacandrade 10 / 74 87  
Mar 13, 2015   #1
The diagram illustrates the process of the greenhouse effect in the atmosphere. Overall, what stands out from the graph shows while this cycle shows a natural process, human activities in recent decades have generated the amount of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere, increasing significantly. This causes the earth's temperature higher.

Basically, energy from the sun will be released to the earth's surface as heat. Not all this energy is reflected off the atmosphere, but some of this is radiated into space and trapped by greenhouse gases. The heat energy captured in the particular layers has generated a warm climate in the planet, namely 'the greenhouse effect'. However, this condition is worsened because of human activities producing the large number of emissions. As a result, the earth's temperature getting warmer gradually as too much heat has been trapped in the atmosphere.




mumtazdinar 12 / 15 12  
Mar 13, 2015   #2
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eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Mar 13, 2015   #3
The diagram illustrates the process of the greenhouse ...

I like the way in which you presented this intro. You started introducing the diagram with a simple sentence showing a process of greenhouse. Likewise, you created an overview with a periodic sentence to show general discussion.

Basically, energy from the sun will be released to the earth's ...

Well, I think that you succeeded to present well-prepared sentences. Initially, this paragraph starts to explain the sun as the main source of energy transferring heat to the earth. Then, it is followed by some sentences describing how the greenhouse effect is created. However, I suggest having a bit change for this

Not all this energy is reflected off the atmosphere

which should be Not all is this energy reflected of the atmosphere. Here, you are to use an inverted sentence.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the picture reveals ...

Good. What has been shown here is some detailed information dealing with the process of carbon dioxide, from how human activities affect the environmental damage to which areas of the earth are reached down to amounts of toxic gases.


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