[IELTS Task 1] The proportion of energy from coal

The graph shows the proportion of energy that was produced from coal in four European countries from 1995 to 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the percentage of energy produced from coal in 4 European countries during 15 years, between 1995 and 2010.

It is noticeable that the percentage of coal energy in three countries decline simultaneously. However, the figure of coal power in Denmark shows the reverse over the period.

The highest percentage of power produced from coal was recorded by Denmark in 1995. Then followed by Germany, this figure for coal energy stood at under 60%. In terms of percentage of energy produced from coal, France as the lowest percentage was 30 percent of all countries. Between 1998 and 2001, the percentage of coal power experienced a dramatic decrease in Sweden, France, Denmark and Germany.

A closer look at the data reveals that the percentage of coal energy which is produced in three European countries remained reasonably stable from around 28% to 20% between 2004 and 2007. Standing in contrast, the proportion of energy produced from coal in Germany saw a sharp downward from approximately 15 percent to 5% between 2004 and 2007, a drop of about 10% in 3 years.

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- does the data for Germany and France come from 1995 as well? I suggest that you mention the year the data covers for those countries so that the reader will know if the information is all connected or should be considered independently. This kind of report is very information precise and requires factual data in order to be considered authoritative and academic.

1. You need to rephrase in introduction, my friend.
2. Your overview is not enough.
3. Your body parts are quite chaos.
(The line graph illustrates the percentage of energy produced from coal in 4 European countries during 15 years, between 1995 and 2010.)
The line graph illustrates the figure in terms of producing energy by using coal of four countries in Euro over a period of 15 years

It is noticeable that the percentage of coal energy in three countries decline(declined) simultaneously. However whereas the figure of coal power in Denmark shows the reverse over the period.

Additionally, the trend producing energy from fossil fuels decreased throughout the years.

A closer look at the data reveals that the percentage of coal energy which is(This brings a problem, in terms of tense use. Write which are, or omit it.) produced in three European countries remained reasonably stable from around 28% to 20% between 2004 and 2007.


write "a decrease", instead of this.


I couldn't agree more. You need to deliver obvious improvement in bodies. Let's say, you might group them by the first two countries: German and Denmark in one paragraph, and the other countries in the next one.


Simple write: Coal energy sources