The proportion of households in owned and households in rented accommodation in England and Wales

Accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of households in owned and households in rented accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall, the percentage of people rented accommodation in two countries recorded a significantly decrease over a decade. While the opposite is true for households in owned accommodation.

As we can see, the proportion of people renting accommodation in 1918 was 77%, which was the highest in the chart. During the following years, England and Wales saw a dramatic decline to 37% in 2011. While an enormous growth was recorded in people who owned house by 41% between 1918 and 2011.

From 1939 to 1953, the percentage of families in rented accommodation and people owned accommodation in England and Wales remain unchanged. Between 1991 and 2001, the percentage of people had own house observed a slight increase whereas a marginal drop was seen in families rented house for living

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