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The proportion of households in owned and households in rented accommodation in England and Wales


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Mar 18, 2022   #1

Accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011



The bar chart illustrates the proportion of households in owned and households in rented accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall, the percentage of people rented accommodation in two countries recorded a significantly decrease over a decade. While the opposite is true for households in owned accommodation.

As we can see, the proportion of people renting accommodation in 1918 was 77%, which was the highest in the chart. During the following years, England and Wales saw a dramatic decline to 37% in 2011. While an enormous growth was recorded in people who owned house by 41% between 1918 and 2011.

From 1939 to 1953, the percentage of families in rented accommodation and people owned accommodation in England and Wales remain unchanged. Between 1991 and 2001, the percentage of people had own house observed a slight increase whereas a marginal drop was seen in families rented house for living
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 13,560 4442  
Mar 18, 2022   #2
The writer tends to have a redundant presentation in the use of the word "household", It was used as a descriptive term repeatedly in one paragraph proving that the English vocabulary of the author is limited and he does not know ample knowledge of alternative word usage. This must be improved in future essays as his LR score will suffer because of it.

With regards to sentence structure, the presentation of the summary overview and the reporting paragraphs requires more division of content for clarity. That means, every sentence must contain only one idea to give clarity to the paragraph. Run on sentences as presented will lower the GRA score due to a confusing thought presentation.

The aassumption when writing this report is that the reader cannot see the actual image. Hence the need for a creative and imaginative way of reporting the information. There can be no reference to "as can be seen" because of the writing method required.


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