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[IELTS Task1] The proportion of women's and men's driving test pass rates in one Asian country


clairewuwu 1 / -  
Nov 17, 2021   #1

[IELTS Task1] Driving test pass rates



The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

The bar chart compares the proportion of women's and men's driving test passed in one Asian country from 1980 to 2010.

It is clear from bar chart that women have a higher proportion of driving test passed than men in one Asian country throughout the period shown.

In 1980, the percentage of women who passed driving test stood at around 50%, while the proportion of men passing driving test just were under 30%. Over the following 20 years, the percentage of passing driving test both for women and men that showed an upward trend. Also, the figures of women and men succeeding driving examinations rose by around 20%.

Between 2000 and 2010, there were little changes in the percentage of women and men who succeeded driving examination. The percentage of women passing driving exam fell slightly by around 2%. On the other hand, the figures of men were the same, at about 50%.



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Nov 18, 2021   #2
Go for a more complex sentence structure in relation to the time measurements. Itis more impressive to say" ... covering a full decade from... " than simply . the coverage years. A little sentence structure complexity will always help your LR and GRA scores.

in one Asian country

This is a redundancy or repeated phrase. You do not have to mention the location twice. Once is enough to help you avoid being judged as using memorized phrases. If you want to mention it again, then change the word presentation through proper synonym usage.

for women and men that showed an upward trend

That adjective does not need to be used in the sentence. at created an unfamiliar sentence presentation due to the incorrect word formation / structure.

The writeh just need to address some written grammar issues going forward. Otherwise, the written presentation is acceptable and may recieve a lease passing score overall.


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