The Proportion of The World's Spending, Population, and Consumption of Resources

The pie charts below show World Spending, World population and Consumption of Resources

The pie chart gives information about the proportion of the world's spending, population, and consumption of resources. Overall, USA and Europe have a less population than Asia, but for the utilization of raw materials, those use the most of the sources. It is also important to note that the significant proportion for the world's spending is expending on food.

Following this chart, most of the world's resources is consumed by three-fifths American and European, while two-fifths of the rest is consumed by other countries. On the contrary, inhabitants in America and Europe are just under a quarter. This is smaller than Asia which has nearly three-fifths inhabitants of the world, while Africa and other countries have minority populations.

Turning to the world's expending, there are five kinds that people commonly spend the wealth. The large proportion, nearly a quarter people expend money on food, whilst the very small number of people spends on collecting clothes. People also expend more money on housing and transport which have less than a third of proportion, and two-fifths society use for other needs.

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... but for the utilization of raw materials, those use the most of the sources...

... world's resources is ARE consumed by three-fifths American and European, while two-fifths of the rest is consumed by other countries. On the contrary, inhabitants in America and Europe are just under a quarter. This is smaller than Asia which has nearly three-fifths inhabitants of the world, while Africa and other countries have minority populations.

- Question, why are you discussing minority populations when the charts don't make any reference to this? You are only supposed to refer to provided information that comes from the chart since that is verifiable.

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You seem to have some misconceptions about the chart. You better double check your report information with the data provided int he chart just to make sure your report summary is accurate. You could lose points for any or all misconstrued facts.

Febri, yours is one of the more perfected versions of this summary report. The grammar that you used is fairly advanced and shows that you are capable of more advanced English word usage and logical development. These attributes will ensure that this essay would get a higher than average but a little lower than perfect score had it been an actual IELTS test.

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