The given table shows the comparisons of the proportions of students attending in 4 different educational institutions are the specialist, grammar, voluntary-controlled and community, between 2000 and 2009. It is noticeable that in three educational institutions the total of presented students decreases over the time. By contrast, community school has a significant increase in students attending.
To begin, voluntary was the dominance in pupils attending at 52%, compared by grammar which only stood at 24% while specialist and community had the equal number at 12%. During 2006, community markedly escalated by approximately 20%. By contrast, even voluntary was still the most attendance although it showed a slight decrease to 38% and followed by grammar which decreased to one in twenty while the specialist was the least decrease which only by 1%.
By 2009, the lowest attendance was on specialist then followed by grammar which accounted less than a fifth. Meanwhile, community slightly increased to around 60% which was three times as much as voluntary schools which was around 20% of pupil's attendance.
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==> ... attending in 4 different educational institutions (.)(New sentence)are the specialist, grammar, voluntary-controlled ...(this sentence is too long, maybe you can make it short)
==> ... educational institutions the total of presented students decreases (ed) over the time.
==> By contrast, (school) community school has a significant increase ...
==> To begin (First/ at the beginning), voluntary was the dominance in pupils attending at 52%(I'm sorry, I did not get what you mention) , compared by (the) grammar which ...
==> ... although it showed a slight decrease(d) to 38% and followed by (the) grammar which (...) was the least decrease which only by(at) 1%.
In this case, maybe you can give the table, it will help to correct your work
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Hi Abraham..
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The given table shows the comparisons of the proportions (...) total of presented students decreasesdecreased over the time. By contrast, community school has had a significant increase ...
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Hello I will give you suggestion:
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The given table shows the comparisons of ...
It will be good if you say:
The table gives information about the comparison of proportion students which is attend in different institutions between 2002 to 2009. The educational institutions consist of the specialist, grammar, voluntary-controlled and community, .....................................
