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pros and cons when children were learned foreign language in primary shool



Vihuynh 6 / 10  
May 29, 2014   #1
In the modern day, the society develops so fast with a lot of social networks to make people closer. So, communicating by foreign language was become the important factor to make the transnational relationship. That's the reason why many children to being learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Personally, I think this issue has advantages and also disadvantages.

That will have a lot of advantages when children were learning foreign language while they were a kid. Because of the acumen of kid they will learn easier than the teenager. Moreover, their brain will acquire foreign language, so that make them can learn it clearly and professionally.

However, there are also have a lot of disadvantage when children learn other language in primary school. They are still too young, so learning other language may be not a necessary skill. If they were learned foreign language, they may forget mother language because they haven't use mother language completely. Besides, they will live under of pressure because they have to learn two languages at the same time. Meanwhile, in the secondary school, they have older and their brain was more developed, so they can have the ability to learn other languages because they had understand clearly mother language.

In sum up, I think that learning foreign language at primary school have more disadvantages than advantages. Thus, parents should think carefully before they decide to take children to learn other language when they have been too young.

Abdurasul 32 / 78  
May 29, 2014   #2
so that make them can learn it clearly

there are also have a lot of disadvantage

they were learned

they have older and their brain was more developed

These sentences are TOO confusing and need "re-writte".
Moreover, I noticed a lot of misuses of articles :(

Note: before posting essays, be sure that you are giving full prompts(agree or disagree? both views?) and the purposes(IELTS, TOEFL) of them.
OP Vihuynh 6 / 10  
May 30, 2014   #3
thanks for your helping. You know, I'm quite bad in writing skill and that the reason why I really need you helping :)
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
May 31, 2014   #4
That will have a lot of advantages when children were learning foreign language while they were a kid.

This sentence shows faulty reference of a pronoun.

that make them can learn it clearly and professionally.

This part show a problem with a subject-verb agreement.


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