Pygmalion Paragraph for brochure

okay we were asked to create a brochure about the play pygmalion.. so please help me make it more intresting and effective that it encourages the reader to watch the play... :)

Pygmalion is a Greek myth about love and perfection presented by Bernard Shaw in this play. Where a sculpture creates a statue of a woman so perfect that he gets in love with it and prays to his god's to make it come to life. This is the idea about the play where a poor flower girl from the gutter called "Eliza Doolittle" who is very dirty and has no manners and her dream is to be a better person and become a more decent, gentle girl. Then an opportunity comes to her were she hears two gentlemen called "Higgins" and "Pickering" talking about Eliza and Higgins say's that he can change her in a duchess. Should she grabs the opportunity or not, so she decides to grab it and goes to the two gentlemen, So Pickering challenges him claiming that Higgins can't do it and Higgins accepts the bet and the excitement begins. But the question is can Higgins really transfer her to a duchess, or will he fail and never change her, and will he fall in love with her or not like the myth. Go to see it in theatre now and you will find out.

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Pygmalion takes its name from a Greek myth about love and perfection presented by Bernard Shaw in this play. Where a sculptor who creates a statue of a woman so perfect that he falls in love with it and prays to his gods to make it come to life. The sculptor in this play is a man named Higgins, who believes he can mold aThis is the idea about the play where a poor flower girl from the gutter called Eliza Doolittle, who is very dirty and has no manners, and her dream is to be a better person and become a more decent, gentle girl. Then an opportunity comes to her were she hears two gentlemen called "Higgins" and "Pickering" talking about Eliza and Higgins say's that he can change her ininto a duchess. Should she grabs the opportunity or not, so she decides to grab it and goes to the two gentlemen, So Pickering challenges him claiming that Higgins can't do it and Higgins accepts the bet and the excitement begins. But the question is Can Higgins succeedreally transfer her to a duchess?or will he fail and never change her, and Will he fall in love with her or not like the myth . Go to see it in theaters now and you will find out.

You need to add another rhetorical question or two near the end, in order to build more excitement, but the above changes should get you started on your second draft.

Hey, that is good stuff from Sean! Yes, the parts where you tell some of what happens in the story do not help so much... your job is to create tension, in the sense that you want to get the reader wondering about the situation.

I like the idea of adding a rhetorical question. You can apply these changes Sean recommended and think about how to make the reader want to know what happens.