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TASK 1 ; Qualifications for English Language Teachers obtained 2007/8 and 2008/9, UK

Btihbk11 8 / 9  
May 17, 2016   #1
The table below shows the number of students living in the UK gaining English language teacher training qualifications in 2007/8 and 2008/9, and the proportion of male qualifiers.

A breakdown of data about the total number of students who acquire two types of English Teacher Qualification Training between 2007/8 and 2008/9 which is compared in table. Overall, it is noticeable that female students obtains higher quantity than male in both categories while TEFL is more popular than Cambridge UCLES CELTA & other degrees after being measured by the number of qualifiers.

TEFL had a predominant number of participator than Cambridge UCLES CELTAS & other degrees within two years. While TEFL attained around 25.000 participators, Cambridge UCLES CELTAS & other degrees only composed about 6000 qualifiers in two respective years. However, Cambridge UCLES CELTA & other degrees showed a slight increase by approximately 650 while TEFL roughly fell by 529 in the second year.

Move to more detail analysis, it was clearly seen that even though, the number of female qualifiers was higher than man in both exams, they also experienced a small decrease from 18.460 to 18.446 in TEFL in a year. Meanwhile, in both types of the test, the number of male tailed of about 200-300 students over two years period. Consequently, the male percentage have never reached 30 % neither in TEFL nor in Cambridge UCLES CELTAS & other degrees under review period.

akbartaufiq25 7 / 81 54  
May 18, 2016   #2
Furqanda, you show me an excellent writing. Although your writing almost has no issues, there are several minor things to be addressed here. You may consider the following suggestions:

"..which is compared in the table."
"..obtains higher quantity than male in both categories, while.."
"..the male percentage havehas never reached.."

Also, I found that you often use word "while" within the essay which is quite bothering me. Try to use more varieties of transitional phrase as it will make your writing better. I wish that you will disseminate your knowledge by helping the other members regarding their writing in this forum. Keep up the good work!
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
May 18, 2016   #3
Hi Furqada, the analysis you made is written fairly well, you made sure that the information transpired in your essay. The details of your analysis is also clearly elaborated in this writing. The words you choose are direct and precise, this is very important when it comes to this type of writing as the details are very crucial in order to understand the analysis.

Now, as mentioned, you have a fairly written essay, however, I noticed that some of the verb forms that you use are past tense, when it should be present tense, this is very important when it comes to creating a well constructed essay. What you need to do is to review the language rules again and remind yourself of the verb tenses, this review will definitely help you come up with a stronger analysis.

There you have it Furqada, I hope you follow through with the suggested modifications and keep writing.

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