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Task 2 question: Some people believe it would be better to build houses in existing towns....



Nguyenfromhanoi 1 / -  
Nov 5, 2021   #1
More houses are needed in many countries to cope with increasing populations.
Some people believe it would be better to build houses in existing towns and cities, while others think that the government should develop new towns in rural areas.


Discuss both views and give your opinion.



In our modern society, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on constructing new accommodation to meet the demand of the increasing population. There are valid opinions on both sides, which I will consider now.

On the one hand, it is commonly believed that a huge amount of money for construction purposes can be reduced if new houses are placed on the existing town. A well developed infrastructure in major cities is expected to be well integrated with any nearby resident. As a result, a significant amount of the state budget for building new services is unnecessary. In addition, living in the cities offer a wider range of well-paid careers, which means settling down in the urban areas is prioritized by the government and numerous citizens.

On the other hand, one major benefit of developing in rural areas, which also means lowering the population density is that the deteriorating tendency of polluting is probably stopped. Having an equal number of inhabitants in different areas also improved the average living standard considerably,as well as creating proper service for people living in the countryside,...

In conclusion, it is apparent that the benefit of developing in the countryside outweighs its disadvantages. Authority should converted more and more empty space for the benefit of nation,

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15344  
Nov 6, 2021   #2
There are valid opinions on both sides

These should be restated in the paragraph.That is why it is identified as the topic restatement paragraph. The paragraph has failed to accomplish the 1st task requirement.

which I will consider now.

Incorrect task writing restatement and missing opinion presentation.

*The first paragraph totally fails to meet the topic restatement + opinion presentation requirements. It will recieve a failing sectional score.

The discussion paragraphs fail to represent the required individual paragraphs for the public opinion. The essay is based solely on the private opinion of the writer. As such, only one formatting requirement was met out of 2. This could cause a final scoring problem for the exam taker. The response is non-task compliant. The writer must learn to identify the required discussion styles. This one was comparative + personal opinion rather than a single opinion presentation.


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