Task 1: The rate of vehicle registrations (1970-2010) of three common commercial types...

vehicle registrations graph

Essay topics:
The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the rate of vehicle registrations from 1970 to 2010 in three primary business vehicles in the US.

Overall, the majority of Americans enrolled in trucks. In addition, the percentage of truck and taxi registers followed an upward trend while the reverse was seen in the share of bus enrollments.

In particular, commencing at approximately 50% in 1970, the figure for truck-registered users dropped significantly to 30% in the next ten years. Following this, it bounced back from 30% to 50% between 1970 and 2010. In contrast, the rate of bus registers, which underwent a threefold rise from 5% in 1970 to nearly 15% in the following ten years, fell drastically to below 5% in 2010.

In the meantime, the number of taxies registrations accounted for nearly 25% in 1970, after which it climbed sharply to above 35% in 1980. Subsequently, it plunged to 15% in 2000; thereafter, it recorded a noticeable rise of 20% in 2010.

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Please help me to evaluate my writing skills, read and comment if it's possible, and please also give a score. Thank you in advance.

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There are actually 2 graph images to be identified in this image. In no particular order, the presentation contains a basic line graph and a dotted line graph. It is important to differentiate between the two images due to the measurement references being made. The line graph is continuous, while the dotted line graph is a broken measurement that can be referred to in the same manner when describing it in the reporting and analysis paragraphs.

A more accurate summary overview should have contained 2 sentences that referred to (1) The type of image and (2) an enumeration of the listing attached to it. This is to help create a more solid reference foundation when the trending paragraph is explained to the reader. This is necessary since the premise of a sentence is to include related information instead of compressed information. A single reference per sentence will score better than a long single summary sentence.

The taxi reference is under analyzed and reported. There are only 2 sentences in that presentation, which means it does not meet the 3 sentence minimum standard for the paragraphs in the task. You missed out on a comparative analysis sentence when it came to the cross-information relating to the taxis and trucks between the years of 1970 and 1980. That is a highly relevant comparison, a small but important one, to make in the paragraph.

Overall, this is a pretty good attempt at a task 1 essay. It should receive a passing score. Unfortunately, you will have to contact me privately for detailed scoring considerations but I can assure you that you did good enough to receive at least a base passing score.