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IELTS Task 2 'Reading books only containing real established facts'


mhss 18 / 53 18  
Mar 22, 2013   #1
Q: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should read only those books that are about real events, real people, and established facts. Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion.

A: Habit of reading will be continued further only if the content of the reading is interesting. On the other hand, those of are from the real world may be beneficial in acquiring knowledge on factual things. Based on two arguments, I firmly believe that both types of books are to be read not limiting to a side in getting the most out of it.

Restricting oneself to books on real mattes renders the reader to get certain advantages. First of all, established factual things help to be a person with a through background knowledge. In addition, these will be helpful to cultivate the patriotic ideas in youngsters and to be role models for the future generation. Therefore, it is advised to devote part of our time refer these type of materials as well.

Nevertheless, reading materials of other types including fiction exhibits a range of positive effects. This variety of books suits different ages and educational levels. For instance, an elderly living alone can spend the long lonely hours sticking to a novel. Similarly, a child will keep on reading a book with miracles of fairy tales or cartoons but may be bored by a referring a political book. Further point, is that ones ability of writing can be sharpen by going through the literature which are mostly creative piece of writings. Therefore, people prefer to be in fantasy worlds rather than dealing with the absolute truth.

In conclusion, it is unfair to make restrictions on readers to stick to so call real, but they should give the choice to select as to what should read. This balance is detrimental in acquiring facts as well as other abilities related to reading.

ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Mar 22, 2013   #2
Habit of reading will be continued further only if the content of the reading is interesting. On the other hand, those of are from the real world may be beneficial in acquiring knowledge on factual things. Based on two arguments, I firmly believe that both types of books are to be read not limiting to a side in getting the most out of it.

This is a good introduction. I have just one suggestion. The introduction should be opened with a motivator (an attractive statement), as well as the motivator should prepare the reader's mind for the following arguments.

I firmly believe that both types of books are to be read not limiting to a side in getting the most out of it.

It would be better to write the reasons why you took this position at the end of the introduction (through 2 or three words) to provide an outline for the body. In this way the reader can easily find out that you are going to talk about what issues at each paragraph of the body. This is called "blueprint".

Restricting oneself to books on real mattes (you can use the phrase "realistic books/fictions") renders the reader to get certain advantages. First of all, established factual things help to bebring a person with a through background knowledge (add an example here. How may the factual things provide a person with knowledge? It is not clear. You should support whatever that you claim in the body) . In addition, these will be helpful to cultivate the patriotic ideas in youngsters and to be role models for the future generation (How? make the point more apparent. Writing an example, talking about a personal experience, using the statements by authorities, etc., are the ways by which you can support your ideas) . Therefore, it is advised to devote a part of our time refer these types of materials as well.

Nevertheless, reading materials of other types of materials , including fiction, exhibits a range of positive effects (I prefer the word "aspects" rather than "effects") . This variety of books (u did not talk about variety of such books at the previous sentence. I think you should mention this point first, and then talk about its advantages) suits different agesgroups and people with a broad range of educational levels. For instance, an elderly who livesing alone can spend the long lonely hours sticking to a novel. Similarly, a child will keep on reading a book with miracles of fairy tales or cartoons but may be bored by a referring a political book (Suggestion: "... by reading a book that revolves around political issues." . Further point, is that ones ability of writing can be sharpen by going through the literature which are mostly creative piece of writings (I think this point is not a valid point, since one can improve his/her writing skills even by reading the books which are based on facts. By the way, this later sentence is a subtopic sentence, and you need to support it. Add an example. For instance, you could say that "When I started reading xx, yy, and zz books, which included unreal characters, I found out that they could extremely ameliorate my writing proficiency. I think the reason why they were more effective for improving my writing skill than the books with real contents is that they were more attractive for me, and thus, I was spending more time on reading them") . Therefore, a group of people prefer to be in fantasy worlds rather than dealing with the absolute truth.

Hope this helps
Cheers,
Ahmad
OP mhss 18 / 53 18  
Mar 22, 2013   #3
Hi Ahmad,
Thank you for the valuable suggestions and analysis in detail pointing out mistakes.

mhss.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 23, 2013   #4
Habit of reading will be continued further only if the content of the reading is interesting.

Habit of reading depends on if the reader finds interesting contents in books.[
You write so well... I only wish you use more direct speech than indirect because it is more clear and stronger in penetrating. However, passive needs to be use wherever it is appropriate :)

Good strategy; first para for and the next one against. You are quite good at this task.
The first body para does not contain a specific example. Pick one example such as someone reading the autobiography of one his country's national heroes. Then link it to the idea of your reason.

Make sure your examples are very specific :)
OP mhss 18 / 53 18  
Mar 25, 2013   #5
Hi dumi
Thanks for your guidance.

mhss.


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