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IELTS: Reading news in the internet or newspapers ?


chaaaany 2 / 3 1  
Apr 7, 2014   #1
With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, reading news or information online is becoming more and more popular in our society. Meanwhile people tend to use the Internet everyday instead of reading in papers. Some people believe that reading in papers will be an old fashioned in the next decade. In my view, I only partly agree with this statement and I will show my opinion below.

To start with, a growing number of people believe that reading news on the Internet is quite effective. This is because they say it is easier than reading newspapers. People tend to use the Internet rather than newspapers. For example, if you want to search for some information, you will use your phone and click on some websites instead of reading papers. In addition, many people think that using the Internet is much more convenient. Moreover, they believe that reading something in papers is quite a waste of time, because they need to get it first then open it and read it. Therefore, today most people are more likely to read news online.

On the other hand, many people hold the view that reading newspapers are not only an old trend but also a wonderful trend. This is because they say it has been part of our society since the beginning of civilization. Moreover, spending too much time online is harmful to the human bodies. For instance, if you look at a screen for a long period of time, you could have eyes strain. Furthermore, avid readers are more likely to read newspapers, they want to touch it and have more objective.

To sum up, an increasing number of people are using the Internet quite often today, due to the advance functions. In my view, there are also some unforgettable points of reading newspapers. Human being always needed to share news, and papers are the way they have done it.
kikiliyik 12 / 35 2  
Apr 7, 2014   #2
"Too sum up" (i think your writing will be better if u use other words)
OP chaaaany 2 / 3 1  
Apr 7, 2014   #3
cheers

: )

I will try to do better
techgeek 7 / 13 1  
Apr 7, 2014   #4
I like your essay and also the structure is like mine. Wish you luck in IELTS exam, friend. :)
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 8, 2014   #5
I will show my opinion below.

Better omit. It adds no value for the intro.

many people hold the view that reading newspapers are not only an old trend but also a wonderful trend. This is because they say it has been part of our society since the beginning of civilization.

This is good, but shows complexity.
Since the dawn of civilization, it is believed reading newspaper has provided the latest information people need.
duo008 6 / 39 5  
Apr 9, 2014   #6
hi, this is also the topic I wanna to write.
I tried to write the body paragraph, can anyone make some feedback to me? THX

It is the true that internet is more convenient way to get the news. For one thing, we can easily find what we want to read on internet. The search engine like Google is extremely helpful to locate the news that you want to read. For another, the news published on internet is always quicker than traditional newspaper. An obvious example is that a picture of 2014 Oscar awards ceremony use only 10 minutes to crash the twitter servers, because over 1 million people forward this picture to their friends. By contrast, newspapers readers have to waiting at least 1 day to see what happen in that ceremony.

However, some advantages of newspapers should not be neglected. Compared with the internet, newspapers are provides more reliable information to us, because news agencies have to take their responsibility to make sure their news is reliable and true to maintain their reputation. But internet news can be issued by anyone and it is hard to guarantee the new is precise and reliable. Besides, we cannot ignore people who have no idea about how to use internet like elder people or some places like Africa have not internet, so newspapers are still their only approach to getting information from the world.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 9, 2014   #7
To sum up,

This item is highly common.
Use these less common lexical items:
The aforementioned evidence examines that ...
Given this evidence, it can be seen that ...


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