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Essay about the reason for learning foreign language - for travel, work, what else?

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Oct 4, 2018   #1
Write about the following topic:
Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

why people learn foreign languages

Some people claim that the reason for learning a foreign language is only to travel or work. However, others believe that these are not the only reasons why people learn a foreign language. I agree with this statement. I agree with the latter statement.

It is true that many people learn a language for travel and work purpose. In current society, it is important that worker should have second language ability. If people do not have this ability, they may be hard to find a job and will become jobless. Learn to travel is also a popular reason, tourists may have better experience if they can speak local language. They can make friend with local people easier compare to people who cannot speak local language.

However, there are still a lot of reason why people learn foreign language. Learn for entertainment is one reason, some people learn foreign language because they want to watch foreign movie. For example, one of my friend really love Japanese movies, she learn Japanese because she want to watch the latest movie and do not want to wait for subtitle translation. Secondly, learn foreign language is good to understand one country's culture. Since translate may differ the original meaning , or is hard to explain by using other language.

In conclusion, there is no doubt that some people learn foreign language for travel and work purpose. However, as other reasons I have mentioned, different people have different reasons for learning new language. To travel and to work in a foreign is not the only reason.
mainguyengoc2908 2 / 4 1  
Oct 4, 2018   #2
I think you should use more academic words to get a higher band score. I think you should mention that the primary role of any languages is communication.
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Oct 5, 2018   #3
Tsling, you are not discussing the essay in the manner indicated by the prompt. You are presenting a single point of view opinion discussion when the prompt requires a pro, con, and personal opinion discussion. The discussion should cover the following paragraphs:

1. People learn languages for travel
2. People learn languages for work
3. Your belief as to why people learn languages (either for work or travel, just one or the other, not both.)

So the correct discussion paraphrase and outline for the prompt is as follows:

People learn various reasons for various reasons. The first is that people learn languages so that they can communicate when they travel abroad. Others learn languages because they get assigned to work out of the country. I believe that the reason to study languages lies between these two reasons. A deeper discussion is to follow below.

In this essay you are saying that you are discussing it from only one side of the discussion, the side that you support. That is the incorrect manner of discussing this essay. This is not an agree or disagree essay nor is it an extent essay. Therefore, your total discussion is wrong and will result in a failing score for this type of work.

You need to be familiar with the varying types of discussion or these Task 2 essays. Only if you know the difference between the instruction types will you be able to properly respond to the essay prompt. Read the sample essays that have been written and posted at this forum. Pay particular attention to the 2 POV + Personal POV discussion samples so that you will learn how to properly format the essay for that type of response. This is a 5 paragraph, not 4 paragraph essay presentation.
minhxinh - / 1  
Oct 5, 2018   #4
you should be more careful when writing essays because i have seen some grammatical mistakes in this essay. Moreover, you incorrectly use some words and collocations, for example, you should apply "native language" instead of"local language". Also, your vocab is quiet simple, you should add some advanced words or phrases to your work.

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