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IELTS Task 2: Travel and work are the only reason for learning a foreign language


Question:

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


reasons to learn a foreign language



There are over a thousand languages spoken in the world that people use in their daily lives. The reason person learning a foreign language may merely for traveling or business purpose.

With the advance of technology, people travel to another country for fun or business is quite common nowadays. It motivates a lot of people obtaining another language as a communication skill. They may be more easy to inquire traveler's guide or bargain at lower price since they know how to use the language well. For business person, they are more accessible to global firms because language is no more a barrier of communication.

However, some believe that there are more incentives for people to learn a foreign language. Take scientists for example, they have to do research with a variety of references from other countries, then they should learn some principles of other languages in order to understand the ideas in foreign language. As for historians, they should learn other languages to understand the living type of other cultures. With thousands of languages spoken in the world, people interchanges their language for better understanding and culture respect.

I do learn languages but not only for traveling or working overseas. Learning foreign language is a way for me to know how people behaves, lives, and think in their own culture. I appreciate different cultures for its own distinction, and learning their languages makes me more acceptable to various cultures.

Overall, traveling and work are major reasons for people to learn a foreign language while there are more cultural or scientific aspects for you to discover rather than language exchange only.

Jul 15, 2017   #2
@Allentseng I can see that you understood the prompt requirement in its original form. Sadly, you were not able to properly restate the prompt, the discussion requirement, and clearly outline the expected discussion in your paraphrased opening statement. The lack of a properly restated prompt shows a lack of coherence and cohesiveness in the opening statement. This will, in an actual test, lead to a lower than passing score for your task accuracy portion. since the Task Accuracy portion is one of the most important considerations in your written essay, it is very possible that your essay will not be very good in the overall consideration of the 4 criteria for scoring.

Speaking of scoring, the overall possible score for your essay is a 4. That is because the essay is not very good when it comes to discussion presentation and formatting. While paragraphs 2-4 shows the correct sentence requirement, the shortness of your opening statement and concluding paragraphs will affect your grammar accuracy score. Keep reminding yourself that the improvement of your score will rely on the more complex sentence presentation and improved vocabulary. The paragraph stands a better chance of proving that you are capable of writing well in English and that you understand how to use English words in the correct context of a sentence if you can present your thoughts within 3-5 sentences per paragraph.

Your line of reasoning and examples provided are good but under developed in terms of proper representation of your discussion. If you try to discuss a limited number of examples, meaning only one example per requirement in the essay, you can spend more time proving that your English language usage has the potential to make you a good student in an English speaking school in the future. Once the reviewer realizes that you have a good command of the English language, meaning you can be understood properly by the reader, then you will most likely improve your overall final score for the essay portion.
I think your essay is good, easy-to-follow writing, understand the topic.
However, there are a few mistakes in your essay such as plural noun.
"The reasonS person learning ...".
I also think you should include your experience in second paragraph or third paragraph because it's like an example.


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