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Task 2: There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company.



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Jan 12, 2024   #1
There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company.
Some believe that money is the main reason. To what extent do you agree and disagree?


It is supposed that money is the chief factor that encourages an individual to keep working for the same company. While I understand the logic behind this suggestion, I still firmly disagree with it for several reasons.

Those who believe that payment is the main motivation for working may have several arguments. They may well argue that it is the element which is important to one's needs. From my perspective, it is undeniable that money plays a vital role in every aspect of life, from daily expenses to long-term financial goals, such as homeownership, education and retirement planning. Without a good salary, individuals may have trouble making ends meet, especially when the cost of living has been rising more and more. Another possible argument is that financial incentives are compelling factors to employees, which could enhance job satisfaction and alleviate financial stress. Such tangible rewards not only recognize an employee's value but also provide them with a sense of stability.

Nevertheless, I still oppose this view for some reasons. Chief among these is that job satisfaction can extend beyond monetary rewards. Factors such as a positive work environment, opportunities for personal growth, work-life balance, and especially passion for the job are considerably more influential. These contribute to an ideal workplace that fosters a sense of belonging and job satisfaction, making employees more likely to stay. Another point worth mentioning is the relationships that individuals build within the company can also be a potent motivator that keeps one to continue devoting to the same firm. Employees may choose to remain with that company because of the friendships they have formed or people for whom they have an affection.

In conclusion, it is understandable that payment is an essential element regarding one's motivation to stay working for the same company. However, I cannot support such a view since many other reasons keep individuals motivated, including job satisfaction and good workplace.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15388  
Jan 13, 2024   #2
You have an under developed essay presentation. The first reasoning paragraphs that explains the reason for money as a reason to stay with a company runs counter to your personal opinion as presented in the first paragraph. Since the examiner will not consider any unrelated discussion paragraphs, paragraphs that do not support your opinion, your word count will then be under the minimum requirement and will be considered for a low score. Since your second paragraph relates to your opinion, then you will not get a failing score. Sadly, it will not be a very impressive passing score either. At least you will not fail the test. Next time, focus only on supporting your opinion unless asked to to compare and contrast or discuss both opinion.


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