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The recruitment of the new two-language teachers among the recently graduated people in Ontario


Linda91 30 / 40 3  
Feb 28, 2016   #1
The graph shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007.

The line graph provides information about recruitment of 2 language teacher with new graduated requirement in Ontario from 2001 to 2007, and it is measured by percentage of first-year teacher with constant teaching jobs by year of graduation. Overall, it can be seen that English teachers showed an upward trend, but French teachers recruitment saw a downward trend.

First of all, English-language teacher stood at 72% in 2001. Next, the percentage of it saw a sudden decrease during 2 years at 40%, and then it was a slight rise to 42% in 2005. Subsequently, there was a significant decline to around 20% at 31% in 2006, which was followed a dramatic decrease approximately 10% at 15% in the end of period.

Turning to French-language teachers, the number of teachers decrease dramatically during 2001 and 2002, but then rose highly to around 10% at 65%. Then, recruitment of French-language teachers rose minimally to around 3% between 2003 and 2005. Next, there was a small decrease roughly 2% at 60% in 2006, which was followed a minimal increase to 75% at the end of period.




Bunglon11 28 / 31 5  
Feb 28, 2016   #2
Hi Linda91 Let me check your essay

this is another intro:
A breakdown of percentage of new language teachers recruitment in Ontario over a 6-year period from 2001 to 2007 is presented in the line chart. Overall, It can obviously be seen that there was a trend change over the period. While recruitment of English teacher experienced a decrease in the last period, French teachers recruitment tended to rise.

... recruitment of 2 language teacher with the new graduated requirement in Ontario (...) by percentage of the first-year teacher with constant teaching jobs ...
Overall, it can be seen that EnglishFrench teachers showed an upward trend, but FrenchEnglish teachers recruitment saw a downward trend. (Observe carefully before writing, wrong analysis influences your score )


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