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Should recycling be a legal requirement? IELTS ESSAY

eli00 1 / 2  
Dec 16, 2017   #1
Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

too many waste

The effects that human activity has on the environment are enormous. Even recycling has introduced as a way to decrease the waste humans are producing, the amount of people participating is very low. Many are the supporters of the suggestion that governments should place recycling as a legal requirement.

The necessity of recycling is known to everyone, but only a few of us choose to follow it and make it part of our daily routine. Many people find it time consuming or inconvenient to separate their waste into categories and place them into the appropriate bin, while others claim that there are not enough bins provided by the government. But we all agree that is our responsibility to protect our planet and work towards solutions.

Sadly, the truth is that people tend to follow the rules more when they know that there are some consequences. If for example there is a fine they need to pay in case they disobey the rules. By making recycling a legal requirement people might take it more seriously and start being responsible.

Governments already trying to encourage people to be more active and participate in recycling. Many campaigns and educational programs have been raised but still, the impact to people's consciousness is low. Maybe the time has come for stricter solutions to be found, as the environmental problems have become more serious and obvious.
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Dec 16, 2017   #2
eli, it is unfortunate that your essay cannot score higher than a band score of 2 based on overall scoring considerations. . You cannot be given a higher grade consideration because, although you attempted to present a position in every paragraph, there is a lack of full discussion development and presentation of supporting ideas. The essay is composed of repetitive information that does not really represent any particular side, offer solid evidence to support the topic sentence, which should have been in the form of an opinion, does not represent any personal experience related to the topic as based on the prompt requirements. Due to the under developed presentation and the lack of a concluding statement in the essay, the work you did cannot get even a slightly passing score. The discussion you made was just good enough to address the task in the simplest manner, but not enough to consider it a strong discussion with relevant supporting information. Since this is your first posting at this forum, I will assume that you are just starting your IELTS review at this point. Don't be too disappointed with your score. Persevere and keep practicing so that you can improve your work. If you continue to post your work here, we can collectively help you improve your writing abilities over time.

The main reason your essay failed is because you kept repeating your prompt paraphrase throughout the essay. It shows that you either did not understand the instructions or, you do not have any personal knowledge regarding the given topic. Try to read more English materials in order to increase your English cultural references and current events information. That will help you better prepare for the popular topics normally discussed in the IELTS essay.
OP eli00 1 / 2  
Dec 16, 2017   #3
Thank you so much for your feedback, I really appreciate it. I will try to improve my writing and come back with more essays hopefully, better :)
ppbbjakarta 2 / 2 1  
Dec 17, 2017   #4
I do appreciated your essay, particularly your idea. However, the foremost problem is that you do not successful address Task Achievement in term of the number of word representing more than 250 word. Following this, I found several mistakes such as.

In the first paragraph
I pointed out several grammatical errors such as
The amount of people - the number of people (countable)
... supporters of the suggestion that ... place THE recycling as ...

... recycling is known OF [ know collocates to OF] everyone.
a few of us chooseS to follow [the subject is a single 'a few'].
Many people find it [needed a preposition] time ...
... our responsibility FOR [Collocation] protectING.

The next paragraph.
... to pay in case they disobey the rules [you need to break down your sentence with comma in order to distinguish between main clause and sub clause]

Governments already trying to ...  if you try to make in present continues, you should add Auxiliary such are or were.
OP eli00 1 / 2  
Dec 18, 2017   #5
Thank you so much for your help. I'm grateful for the time you spent reviewing my essay.

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