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These days, one of the most important problems throughout the global is an environment-related problem, due to fossil fuels polluting air, water and for causing global warming. These lead to many countries like America, trying to develop sustainable energy resources. But, would these fossil fuels can be replaced by energy which can be used again? In my view, I hold with the notion that renewable sources would replace the energy used these days.
First, renewable energy like water, wind, and solar energy is nature friendly. So, replacing fossil fuels with these energy can solve the problem, global warming which occurred by charcoal, petroleum, and gas destroying the ozone layer. To illustrate, when we ride buses, there are many buses using renewable sources. And the numbers of these buses are increasing as the time passes. Also, according to the research done by three colleges in America says buses and other transportation are using these energy sources starting from early 2000, and the number is growing, so over 10 millions buses and other transportation is using these sources these days.
Second, literally, renewable energy could be used again, unlike nonrenewable a resource which is limited. So, sooner or later, we would be run out of nonrenewable resources but, we would be in need of more energy than before. To give you an example like those times Korea undergone a crisis about having a shortage of gas. People desperately needed it to do all kinds of things. When we used of all fossil fuels, this kinds of incidents would happen every day. But, when we look at renewable energy, we can get it from nature whenever we want and also, it is not limited. As a way for getting this energy, it will cost a lot of money, but soon, we will earn more energy than its costs. For instance, a town in Germany has a very clean air due to almost all the people in that town using solar energy they got from sun.
I have come to the conclusion that soon, nonrenewable resources would be replaced by renewable energy for two reasons. First, they do not pollute the air and are no harm to nature. Second, consecutive resources can be produced again and again. I hope renewable resources could be more developed so it would not destroy the nature.
These days, one of the most important problems throughout the global is an environment-related problem, due to fossil fuels polluting air, water and for causing global warming. These lead to many countries like America, trying to develop sustainable energy resources. But, would these fossil fuels can be replaced by energy which can be used again? In my view, I hold with the notion that renewable sources would replace the energy used these days.
First, renewable energy like water, wind, and solar energy is nature friendly. So, replacing fossil fuels with these energy can solve the problem, global warming which occurred by charcoal, petroleum, and gas destroying the ozone layer. To illustrate, when we ride buses, there are many buses using renewable sources. And the numbers of these buses are increasing as the time passes. Also, according to the research done by three colleges in America says buses and other transportation are using these energy sources starting from early 2000, and the number is growing, so over 10 millions buses and other transportation is using these sources these days.
Second, literally, renewable energy could be used again, unlike nonrenewable a resource which is limited. So, sooner or later, we would be run out of nonrenewable resources but, we would be in need of more energy than before. To give you an example like those times Korea undergone a crisis about having a shortage of gas. People desperately needed it to do all kinds of things. When we used of all fossil fuels, this kinds of incidents would happen every day. But, when we look at renewable energy, we can get it from nature whenever we want and also, it is not limited. As a way for getting this energy, it will cost a lot of money, but soon, we will earn more energy than its costs. For instance, a town in Germany has a very clean air due to almost all the people in that town using solar energy they got from sun.
I have come to the conclusion that soon, nonrenewable resources would be replaced by renewable energy for two reasons. First, they do not pollute the air and are no harm to nature. Second, consecutive resources can be produced again and again. I hope renewable resources could be more developed so it would not destroy the nature.
