Report on services provided by health centers

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how patients evaluated health centre services

The table below indicates the evalution done by patients in the Longston, Peveril and Marchbank health centers. Overall, Peveril was regarded as the best health center in all services, followed by the Marchbank center. The services provided by the Longstom center was evaluted as the worst by patients.

To begin, the Peveril center was regarded as close to excellent in the quality of services provided with an overall average of 8.3 across all services. Although, pharmacy and care of children had the lowest rating between the given services in the center, scoring 6.3 and 7.5, respectively, its response to concerns and booking appointments were the fields where the center was miles ahead of the competetion with near perfect ratings of 9.6 and 9.1, respectively.

Meanwhile, the Marchbank center recieved an overall average of 7.2 and the Longston centre got only a 5.8 average rating. While their best rated service was the doctor's service, evaluated to be 8.4 for Marchbank and 8.0 for longston, which was not far from Peveril's 8.7, response to concerns was evaluated as the worst service for Longston and pharmacy the worst for Marchbank at 4.3 and 5.8, respectively.

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