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IELTS TASK 2:Retirement age at 60/65.What is your opinion.



gmad06 20 / 143  
Sep 10, 2013   #1
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TASK:Some people think that one should retire at the age of 60 or 65. Others say that people should be allowed to work for as long as they want to.

What is your opinion about this?


It is a common practice for most people to stop working at the age of 60 or 65 as it is believed that employees are no longer qualified to do their job beyond these ages. However, recent reports denies this theory, it has been proven that mankind is capable of working even at an older age. In my opinion, anyone should be allowed to work for as long as he desires providing that the individual is still physically fit.

Many employers believe that workers who are 60 years and older, are no longer productive in their job. In addition, they may impose danger not only to themselves but also towards their colleagues. However, this should not be the case and it is not a permissible reason to deny workers' rights. If safety measures are properly observed, it is certain that accidents would be avoided. Furthermore, if management observes that an employee is no longer capable of doing his task, they can choose to send the worker into an improvement plan or reassign the person to a position where he could be more efficient. For example, if a supervisor notices their employee is too old to drive, the person should be transferred to a designation which is lesser prone to danger such as a Document Controller.

Aside from the aspect of productivity at work, people also tend to get more sensitive once they reach seniority. They don't want to be dependent to their children. Moreover, neither do they want to be a burden to their families. Most elderly want to feel their presence is appreciated, especially at the last stages of their lives. Thus, they should not be deprived of this feeling.

In conclusion, I personally think retirement should be a voluntary choice and authorities or employers should be there to aid the needs of workers for them to continue their jobs, instead of discouraging them. A person is deemed to be happier and satisfied if he retires in his own will.

muffle 3 / 12  
Sep 10, 2013   #2
anyone should be allowed to work for as long as he desires providing that the individual is still physically fit

everyone should be allowed to work as long as they desire

an employee is no longer capable of doing his task

employees are no longer capable of doing their tasks

Most elderly want to feel their presence is appreciated

...are appreciated

You should not use he/she in an IELTS essay. Overall, ideas are good.


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