... sure...let me first examine your intro carefully :D
In today's world, the use of technology is ever increasing.
.... Ok, this is your hook :D
Even in classrooms,technology can be commonly seen.It is disagreed that technology will completely replace the real teacher in a classroom. It is shown by analyzing the inability of a robotic teacher to discipline a misbehaving student in a classroom as well as a robotic teacher hindrance to the learning process of a student.
... I have to take this part as your background section of the intro, ok? :D
The guideline we always provide is aimed at not only helping you to accommodate the most essential features of the essay for you to score, but also help you save time to complete the task. So, by practicing to write your essays in a particular approach would help you immensely at the exam to handle your time effectively. The approach we gave is more straightforward and time effective. This is how I would do this background;Even in classrooms, use of technology can be commonly seen. Some people argue that technology may completely replace the teacher's role in the classroom in time to come.
... this is much shorter than what you have written above, but contains every aspect of the background of the issue. What I did was merely paraphrased the topic.
Lastly, you have not included your own opinion (thesis statement) in the intro. Your prompt asks
Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
So, state your opinion before you conclude your intro;However, I do not agree with this argument and believe that teachers can never be completely replaced by computers.