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What can we do to save our environment?



hamedmas 27 / 48  
Nov 29, 2012   #1
Would you help to correct this essay, thank you...:)
Nowadays, one of the important challenge of humanity is many threats that involved our environment. Green house gases, fumes or many harmful chemical productions have destroyed our natural of the world.from my point of you, many operations could be done to prevent these destruction. Some of these advises are discussed.

To begin with, one of the important issues in our world is increase of green house gasses. Green house gases have harmed our environment specially the ozone layer. Many operations have done for reducing of these gases. Scientists try to make new machine that it does not produce fumes or harmful gases, but new machines just pour out useful gases for natural such as hydrogen. Most of the old factories have produced green house gases more than acceptable level and they should renew. There for, in future, new machines and factories would produce gases that should be harmony with nature. Another useful way to reduce these gases is trees because a tree can reduce these gases. The cultivation of trees in their environment is a good way to reduce green house gases.

Moreover, many of production used these days has damage the nature or not decompose. Many factories have ruined the local river by dumping the chemicals into rivers. These wastes have been dangerous and they threaten many beings. Nowadays, many rubbishes has found in many rivers and mountains that do not decay. It is important to clear up mountains and rivers from wastes and rubbishes; also, the government should prevents all factories from dumping chemicals into river.

In summary, our environment has been threatened by much pollution that have made by us. If we open our eyes, then recognize that it will be a major problem for health of beings in future. Many of factories should be renewable and our nature should maintain clean if health of us is important.

OP hamedmas 27 / 48  
Dec 2, 2012   #2
Hi Mr Zafari
I want to be thankful for spending times in order to correct my essay.
I study more and more times this corrections.
Best regards for you...:)
joythblessy 86 / 266  
Dec 3, 2012   #3
hai...
As ah_zafari pointed out lots of mistaks..i will give you some ideas..

:Reduce use of plastic and encourage use of biodegradable sub. Such as paper products
:Strict norns and conditions for the running of industries by government.
:frequent follow up and huge penalties for vilation of rules.
:cut down the use of private vehicles and switch on to public transport..

Read more essays,
Write againsy time..

Dont worry...

Tessy


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