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Should we save and restore some languages?



lacusclyne 16 / 23  
Jun 29, 2015   #1
There is nothing unusual about a single or two languages dying. In fact, throughout mankind history, communities and dynasties have come and gone all the time. However, the situation is much different presently, languages are disappearing with a fast pace as a result of unison in trades and cultures. For the very first time, linguists shift their concerns on the survival of some languages. Nevertheless, some people think it is a waste of financial resource, which is countered by the opinion that the alternative may be the end of a community. Whereas both opinions have their own points and reason, in my own perspective, effort should be spared to restore forgotten languages.

People who advocate the funding of government to protect minor languages hold several reasons. Firstly, held within each language is the identity of the community of which it represents. Therefore, it is this factors that decide the distinctive and unique nature of different cultures. What is more, Languages are known to evolve along with the progress made by a community, hence, each historical event leaves large impacts and adaptations on the language itself. For an example, Canadian English, as a matter of fact, holds some similarities with American and Britain English, which indicates the struggling history of Canada striving to escape from the influences of the most powerful nations. And thus, studying those languages may help linguists to figure out the history each nation.

On the other hand, the process of restoration of forgotten languages may be, according to some people, a waste of financial resource and time consuming. Firstly, to restore a language, the community of which it is a part must have the respect for that language itself. With all things settled, there are likely to be a huge need for courses, tutoring and materials. Teachers and linguists have to be deployed to remote areas to search for documents. If the languages is to have a future in computer literacy, basic tasks such as getting the language written down, vocals and intonation recording and grammatical analyzing must be done, which is a huge waste to human and financial resources.

To put it in a nutshell, minor or not, languages do enrich our spiritual life, lift our horizon and improve our cultural enlightenment. Therefore, attempts should be made to save and preserve languages.

lcturn87 - / 423  
Jun 29, 2015   #2
I would be happy to assist you with this essay. I have suggested some changes in grammar and meaning.

1st paragraph: In fact, throughout history, communities..." Currently, the situation is much different because languages are disappearing at a fast pace as a result of unison in trades and cultures." Change part of this sentence to:.."linguists are shifting..." Make resource plural in the next sentence.

I'm a little confused when you discuss financial resources. Are the linguists using money to fund research to understand these linguistic patterns?
You could add: "When linguistics study these dying languages, some feel it is a waste of financial resources." This is countered..." What is the alternative? Please explain this point just with a few more words. This is my suggestion for the last sentence. "In my opinion, there needs to be more efforts to restore forgotten languages." If you say "should be spared", it could mean that nothing will be accomplished or done.

2nd paragraph: In the first sentence, change hold to have. Change this sentence to make it plural since you use factors: "Therefore, these factors decide..." Languages should be lowercase. Place a semicolon after community. For an example should be changed to: "For example". Delete "And" when you begin the last sentence. Start this sentence with, "Thus". Place "of" after history.

3rd paragraph: There is a typing error, "maybe" should be one word. Make resource plural. Change this sentence to: Firstly, to restore a language, the community must have respect for that language. Here is a suggestion for the next sentence: "There will also be a huge need for courses, tutoring, and materials to educate the people." Use a transition word such as "Also or In addition" to begin the next sentence.

4th pargraph: I would like to suggest a change for the last sentence. In summary, all languages can enrich our spiritual life, be uplifting,and improve our cultural enlightenment. I think these changes needed to be made because "summary" is a common transition, minor or not could be replaced by stating "all" and lift our horizon needed to be more specific.


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