the various way to educate a child
There are various way to educate a child, such as send them to a boarding school, let them attend a day school. some people insist that boarding school is good for children while others disagree with this view. The question is which one is better for kids. I believe each one has its own benefits.
We all know that many merits of boarding school have been proved. Firstly, children who go to boarding school have to do almost everything on their own, which make them become more independent and have responsibility for things they did. Next, for a kid, being away from parents sometimes means freedom. There's no one to boss them, make them do homework. Besides, no parents can prevents some unnecessary arguments. Furthermore, boarding school create stronger relationships. In other words, children live with their friends, share things, places, stories,... That could be a little annoyed, but after all it still worth it.
What about a day school? This is where children go to study for a couple hour and then back home. Obviously, when kids are with their families, they will be taught not only at school but by parents too. They can feel love and be taken care of, and don't have to suffer from homesickness. Parents will hold their hand through the stressful process. And for those families struggling with financial problems, day school is absolutely a better choice, to compare with.
Choosing the right educational path for children has never been easy. It's depends on both parents and children to decide what should be the best for their future
Holt Educational Consultant - / 15475 In the first sentence, you need to use the word "or" to show the options between boarding school and day school. By the way, you will lose LR points for using cut and paste or memorized words in that sentence. You need to reword the keywords to reflect your LR ability. When you use the same words from the original presentation, you will find that you will have LR points deductions. Learn to use synonyms to help increase your LR score.
Always remember to capitalize the first word of every new sentence. That is part of your GRA consideration. This is one of the few essays where a comparative discussion is actually allowed. You did a good job of transitioning into that discussion in your question response sentence.
More GRA errors in your essay. You cannot and should never, under any circumstance use 2 punctuation marks one after another. That is a large GRA deduction. Either use a comma or use the ellipses. Do not use both. There is no English grammar rule that allows for that. Do not use contractions in your presentation either (There's = There is)
Never pose a rhetorical question in the essay either. Simply continue with the discussion using a topic sentence at the start. The rhetorical question will not help you score any better in any category, it may even serve to create a distraction for you, which will result in a change of discussion flow in the essay. That is why it is better to avoid posing questions in any written essay.
The conclusion is incomplete. You cannot use only 2 sentences, with a missing punctuation mark at the end. Properly summarize the discussion points, then present your opinion again, before you use the last 2 sentences you presented above.
