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Some say that teaching untalented children art in class does not have any benefits for their sake



andika08 81 / 73  
Nov 1, 2016   #1
Question:

It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative and practical subjects which they may have more aptitude. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


Some people said teaching untalented children how to paint and draw in the class does not have any benefits for children's sake. Learning practical subject, more suitable to their interest is more acceptable instead. This essay would totally agree with this idea as learning how to paint or draw needs more time and children would be ready to face a real life when having been eposed to several practical subjects during the school program.

It is generally believed that how to paint and draw by children is take longer time to study. The reason is in this subject contain a different material that not many children can do it. For example, survey from University of Houston stated that 65% of children who learn about art spending much time than in the

others subject. It is true that by learning this subject children cannot focus on others subject.

In addition, another activity such as doing some project in the school would make them find their talent. This is because in this subject provide an practical experiment that make them would learn many new knowledge. For instance, research from University of London stated that 70% of children doing some project and find new discovery was getting the achievement and new experience. It is acceptable that by this practical subject the children would increase their ability to face the next life.

All in all, the art subject considered not really give effect for student that they should focus on studying another subjects doing projects. It would be better to concentrate on practical subjects as it provides more valuable material than art.

marimah 1 / 1  
Nov 1, 2016   #2
hi Andika
your essay have a correct planing
in my opinion you should replace:
This is because in this subject provide ana practical experiment
... a real life when having beeneposed exposed to ...
Some people said believe that
and about your conclusion, it would be better to write in another way.
I hope this will help. Regards.
badafebriani17 34 / 41  
Nov 3, 2016   #3
Hello andika.
actually your essay is really good. but let me give you some suggestions

1. there is a misspelling in this sentence, be careful in spelling, because it is one of assessment elements in academic writing
... be ready to face a real life when having been exposed to several practical subjects...

2. be careful with uncountable noun.. you should use (much or amount etc)
many new knowledge. ----->much new knowledge.
this subject provide(S)
don't forget to add comma when you use conjunction [because, but, such as]
e.g.:This is because in this subject ...
but overall, you have good essay. i can understand your essay well. good luck.


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