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Schooling helps kids to learn socialism and other important lessons - in school


tishca2013 3 / 4  
Oct 16, 2013   #1
Please correct me as m practicing for toefl exam.
Parents are the first teacher of a child because they teach the most basic and initial lessons of life to their kid . Every child has his own ability to learn and to adopt things and so do the parents. Though each system of schooling , either home schooling or regular schooling has its pros and cons, I personally prefer regular schooling i.e. children should be educated at school.

As we human beings are social animals, we need company .we are more comfortable in a company rather than a secluded one. School gives us that facility .It exposes us to different students and different cultures even . As I mentioned earlier, every kid has his own line of thinking .Kids can understand various aspects for a thing .Similarly he can learn different views to look at a thing.The best example is of a half filled glass.If it is shown to students and ask them to share their observations.Few of them can observe its half filled and others can seen it is half empty.That means though object is one, different aspects are there to see it and regular schooling helps to inculcate it in kids.

"Life itself is the best teacher than any books" is the well known saying.School is the outer world for a kid and his home is his own world.By stepping into outer world .Kids can learn many things such as how to get acquainted with other kids and new environment of school .They can learn to get mingle with other kids .They can learn to make friends . They can learn to get adjusted with schedule of school i.e.time management and so on.

Schooling helps kids to learn socialism and other important lessons by going to school .These lessons helps kids to grow as an individual and to survive in this world as a successful person so I support children should be educated at school rather than home schooling.

amymaria 1 / 6 3  
Oct 16, 2013   #2
I am not good at writing though I think you should clear your reasons and put it in the first paragraph of each paragraph. By that way, readers can clearly know what your trying to say. and Where is the conclusion?
something 23 / 52 5  
Oct 18, 2013   #3
I personally prefer regular schooling i.e. children should be educated at school

I personally prefer regular schooling that is children should be educated at school

It is better not to use abbreviation
Jin Hyung 1 / 4 1  
Oct 19, 2013   #4
I am not good at writing too but I would like to give some tips -

- Clear your reasons and put it in the first paragraph of each paragraph. State what you want to say.
- Get your conclusion clearly. And state it at the first, restate at the end.
- Try to develop your idea.
- Use Introduction with following information -
Hook -> Background -> Definition of the question -> Why this problem is important to us or certain people -> Thesis statement.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Oct 20, 2013   #5
"Life itself is the best teacher than any books" is thea well known saying.

.By stepping into outer world .Kids can learn many things such as how to get acquainted with other kids and new environment of school .

These are not two sentences, but one;
By stepping into the outer world, kids can learn important life skills such as how to get acquainted with other kids and work in teams.... of course this is very true :)


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