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Scientific research and experiments are nessesary to deeply understand the inventions


Amirulmumin 2 / 2  
Mar 20, 2016   #1
Scientific research is application of scientific method to the investigation of relationships among natural phenomenon, or to solve a medical or technical problem, nowadays scientific research has gone too deep. Surely, there are many things which we should not attempt to understand and try to apply in our life.

In our life, there are many discoveries by scientist who have been through many experiments. There are many kinds of discoveries from many kinds of field such as medical sector, communication, technology, fishery and agriculture. As the era goes fast, there are many scientist who have been researching for the development of human's life, scientist make an invention to support human life progressing by research. Scientist not only find and develop an invention, but also they make some experiments that are based on scientific method.

In developed area, we can find many inventions that can be seen clearly. They have spread in entire world, such as invention in the technological field like hand phone water resistant, electrical car, in the agricultural field like melon that has many kinds of shape, watermelon without seed and in the fishery we can see jumbo shrimp, soft crab and many others. Nowadays citizen excites and appreciate the new invention that is found by scientist, they not only want to use but also they want to try to find new invention by themselves, but they do not have many materials that make them not able to do it.

The conclusion is, - I personally excited with the new invention that is found by scientist, I want to know and understand how to find a new invention, because when we learn about scientific research and try to find a discovery, we will have widen knowledge, we not only know how to use, but also we can make research too. As the smart citizen we should try to understand about scientific research that can make us so deeply understand about the invention that has been through scientific research process, so I think it will not go far as the statement mention.

Ecila - / 3 2  
Mar 21, 2016   #2
Hi Amirulmumin,
I read your essay and I think that you can improve that a little.
Some things that you could do are avoid repeating words in two consecutive phrases, but that is just a suggestion.
Apart from that here is my advice:

In our life, there are many discoveries by scientist who have been through many experimentsOur life is enriched by new discoveries made possibles by the results of the experiments done by scientists .

As the era goes fast, there are many scientist who have been researching for the development of human's life, scientist make an invention to support human life progressing by research.Many of the researches made have the purpose of supporting our every day life

Scientist not only find and develop an invention, but also they make some experiments that are based on scientific method.---->I think that you should enrich this phrase with some research, like what is the scientific method. An maybe avoid concepts already mentioned in the previous phrases

At some point you say that some inventions are all around the world, but before you say that those are just in developed country. To me that is a contradiction, maybe you should review that part and try to differentiate the discoveries you have listed.

such as invention in the technological fieldin the technological field we can find inventions like hand phone water resistantwaterproof smartphones/cellphones , electrical cars, etc . I n the agricultural field likethere are melon...

to try to find new invention by themselves, but they do not have many materials that make them not able to do it.here you use a double negative, that means that they have many materials that give them the possibility of inventions

The conclusion is, - I personally excited with the new invention that is found by scientist, I want to know and understand how to find a new invention,I am personally exited about the idea of new inventions found by scientists and I would like to know and understand how to do it by my self

As the smart citizens

Hope it helps. And maybe you should explain more why you don't think it will go too far because, maybe it is just me, but I think that it is not well implemented in your essay.

Best of luck!
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Mar 21, 2016   #3
Hi Amirul, as I comprehend your essay, I must say that you started strong, however, the last paragraph needs a little help, kindly find the corrections below;

Last paragraph

- TheIn conclusion is, -, I - am personally
- how to findformulate a new invention,
- and try to findcreate our owna discovery,
- wethis will have widen
- our knowledge,
- we will not only know how to use
- it, but also we can makeand incorporate our research too.
- As thea smart citizen
- we should try to understand about scientific
- research that can makehelp us deeply
- understand more about the invention.that has been through scientific research process, so I think it will not go far as the statement mention.

There you have it Amirul, as mentioned, the last paragraph needed a bit of work, I hope this helps improve the essay and be ready for submission.


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