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IELTS: SCIENTISTS VS POLITICIANS - Who have the greatest influence on our lives?



halleybachelor 16 / 25  
Feb 18, 2014   #1
Some people think scientists have the greatest influence on our lives. Others, however, believe that politicians have the greatest influence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In modern society, people's lives are inevitably involved in both science and politics. The influences that scientists and politicians have on us are sometimes compared by people.

The way that scientists transform our lives is often more visible. Almost everything we use in our lives has close link to science and technology, ranging from the oven used for cooking to the vehicle used for travelling and the computer used for processing information. If it were not for scientists, we would never have discovered and harnessed so many principles of the nature, and we might still live in the primitive age.

Politicians affect our lives in a different way, which is less easily to be noticed. They establish budgets to provide public facilities and services; they make and enforce laws to maintain equality and justice; they build up armies to defend national security. If it were not for them, the society would be in a mess, and we could not have been living in an organized way.

While I acknowledge that scientists and politicians are both essential to a well-developed society, I tend toward the opinion that scientists have deeper and longer influence. For example, although paper was invented over two thousand years ago, it is still a necessity in our life. However, the political system built at that time is unlikely to be missed by people today.

In conclusion, scientists and politicians influence our lives in their own ways, but it seems to me that the influence of the scientists is more direct and powerful.

SHanafi 120 / 357  
Feb 18, 2014   #2
hi, I confuse about this clause

If it were not for scientists,

where is verb "were" dealt with ? for "it" or "scientists". If it pairing with "scientists", can I said that it doesn have verb ?
sandipsinh 37 / 88  
Feb 18, 2014   #3
Hey hi,

Overall fair construction of essay, but little carefulness can make it better,

if it were not for them - is obscure.
SUBJECT IS MISSING - ur sentence confuse whom are you referring by stating them.

if they (politician) were not for the populace,It would be difficult....

Tip - if you are confused with your pronouns - use noun at least it won't make your message/meaning perplex.
Good luck
dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 19, 2014   #4
The influences that scientists and politicians have on us are sometimes compared by people.

This sentence does not contain any meaningful idea :(
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Feb 19, 2014   #5
Your body paragraphs need to contain specific examples to support your reasoning.


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