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Shopping habits depend most on age group. Agree/disagree



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Jul 11, 2023   #1

Shopping habits depend most on age group. Agree/disagree



Customer psychologists have spent several years making sense of and analyzing people's shopping patterns. While some suggest that age is the most influential factor, I would argue that there are other aspects that also significantly affect one's shopping list.

On the one hand, the disparities between younger and elder customers can be attributed to their personal preferences and requirements. In particular, older people, due to their weakened immune systems, are more prone to life-threatening illnesses and diseases. Understandably, they have to make frequent purchases of prescription medicines in order to satisfy their medical needs. Teenage individuals, however, have a wide range of hobbies as they are still in the process of exploring themselves and the world. As a result, they would be more inclined towards products and equipment that specifically cater to their demands. For instance, those who express an interest in ballets have to renew their pointe shoes every month and pay for their dancing courses, while artistic ones would like to try out a variety of art supplies to challenge themselves and figure out their comfort zones.

On the other hand, it is my firm conviction that the financial division in our society would exert more of an impact on customers' shopping habits. Despite the universal desire to own expensive products, people have to prudently organize their purchases in alignment with their budget and save a portion of their income for unexpected expenses. In Vietnam, people from disadvantaged backgrounds frequent the local market to buy affordable food and ingredients, while affluent households would opt for high-quality imported products available in the supermarkets. This stark contrast highlights how much shopping patterns can diverge due to financial constraints.

In conclusion, while there are indeed discrepancies in terms of preferences in different generations, financial status remains to be the biggest determinant of one's shopping habits.

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Jul 12, 2023   #2
Customer psychologists have spent several years making sense of and analyzing people's shopping patterns

This is a falsehood and misrepresentation of the given prompt. There is no reference to such experts in the original prompt. You have to be honest in your rewording. Do not include references that will not be supported by the original presentation. You will lose points for that sentence. It will not be considered as an acceptable part of the paraphrase.

Do not use the comparison style of discussion in the essay as that will cloud your opinion score. The examiner will be confused as to what your actual opinion is. What he will do is, he will disregard the non opinion supporting paragraph and just score the related paragraph. This will lower your score based on an under developed explanation as there needs to be 2 supporting reasons for you to gain full scoring consideration in a single opinion essay.


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