Similarities in the amounts of intakes of different meats in some European countries

IELTS task 1: Meat Consumption

A glance at the graph provided reveals some striking similarities between the amounts of intakes of different meats in a European country.

It is evident that there was a drop in total consumption from 1979 to 2004. Many had more than 10% change, by contrast, the weekly input of fish per week remained stable at all times, with merely a drop of 5% way from 1979.

It is interesting to note that, people included more chickens in their eating habit significantly despite reducing the number of others. That was nearly a twofold increase. As chickens ate by people per week, climbed from about 150 grams per week to 250, with considerable fluctuations in between.

However, regarding other meats, all inevitably decreased throughout the years. Beef once was the preferable choice of meat until 1989, when chickens outstrip beef as the most favourable choice for them. Then the number continued to decline and plunged to a low approximately in 2000.

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Hi Fiona, welcome to EssayForum :)

I can see that your essay structure is quite messy. Therefore, I would like to give you some tips in a brief description about how to create a well-structured IELTS Task 1 essay.

1st paragraph:
- 1st sentence > Paraphrase the question
- 2nd & 3rd sentence > Write an overview that indicates the key features, general trends, or stages that is interesting to be described (do not come up with details. Remember, a tendency to focus on details would drag band score down to 5.)

2nd paragraph has the same structure as 3rd paragraph. The difference is about how you group the information given. For example, the graph that you've uploaded shows a brief timeline from 1979 to 2004. You can just simply describe the half period for the second paragraph, and the other half period for the third paragraph. By doing this, you've fulfilled the task given and more likely to reach a high band score. My suggestion is that you need to read more sample answers to help you.

PS: (some sample answers might place their overview in the last part of the essay. I suggest you to place it in the beginning in order to catch up with the time limit. Remember, you only have 20 minutes for task 1. Writing overview in the beginning would save time.)