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Social networks (Facebook) are harmful: agree vs disagree.



Abdurasul 32 / 78  
Oct 21, 2014   #1
Question:
The increasing number of social networking sites does more harm than good to people. Facebook can be taken as an example. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?


It is certainly true that the social networks, particularly Facebook, have become an inseparable part of our lives. While there are some valid arguments to the contrary, I believe that the benefits of Facebook outweigh its drawbacks.

On the one hand, there are some people who argue that networks such as Facebook are resulting in social isolation. To clarify, those people who are engaged in surfing the social sites excessively are tend to have a lack of confidence while "tete-a-tete" conversations with other people. Therefore, they do seem to loose their communications skills. On the other hand, the rest of people underline the fact about the existence of adult content which can have an adverse impact on children. However, there are certain advantages that can easily overwhelm potential pitfalls of using the social networks.

Further and even more importantly, Facebook does seem to have a wide range of positive features. Firstly, many people have benefited from this social webpage for its usefulness in terms of education. Facebook users, for example, can get daily suggestions for their study aspects by clicking "like" buttons on different pages. Secondly, it has become a powerful tool in order for people to keep in touch with loved ones in far away places. Finally, there is no doubt that for the majority of people Facebook has become a place where they can share all their experiences (photos, videos, links and so on).

In conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that the social networks that are similar to Facebook have been very positive trend due to the aforementioned reasons.

Vera Canderine 2 / 4  
Oct 21, 2014   #2
Well, I think the expression "Further and even more importantly" should be replaced by On the other hand. In the first body paragraph, you use " On the one hand", so what is the other hand ??
YULIS 9 / 16  
Oct 21, 2014   #3
In conclusion, i once again reaffirmi think better use other sentences. my position that the social networks that are similar to Facebook facebook have been very positive trend due to the aforementioned reasons.


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